Safely Home – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
And the prompt, which this week is a photo by C. E. Ayr.
Hooray for me.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© C. E. Ayr


Click here to hear the writer read his words
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Safely Home

She is home.
She gets out of the car, gathers up her parcels,
and lifts her bag.
She looks around, knowing she is safe, but still nervous.
It takes time to get over an experience like that.
A tall thin man.
A long thin knife.
She was walking home then.
Now she has the car, has parked right outside her house.
She
climbs the steps, fumbling for her keys.
She smiles, wondering if her husband is home yet.
As she reaches for the lock, the door opens.
And there he is.
Smiling.
A tall thin man.
A long thin knife.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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69 Responses to Safely Home – Friday Fictioneers

  1. gahlearner says:

    I find few things more terrifying than murderous stalkers and you wrote that tension and horror perfectly. What a story for such a lovely picture you gave us (thank you!).
    I should have expected the ending, but was frightfully startled nevertheless. One more who’ll confess over at Rochelle’s, I’m afraid.

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  2. magarisa says:

    You lull the reader into a false sense of security, and then… BAM! Nicely done!
    Thanks for the picture prompt this week. 🙂

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  3. Thanks for the lovely photo-prompt.
    she is home but not safe. The rhythm of the story was song-like but the ending ave me goosebumps. No person has to open such a door.

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  4. Yes, I really enjoyed the rhythm the repetition contributed to the story. These long thin men, they slip through the tiniest cracks, don’t they? 😉

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  5. Rowena says:

    Beautifully written, CE and rather chilling.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  6. Tessa says:

    Great picture and a great story to go with it. Creepy!

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  7. ahtdoucette says:

    Ah! Creepy twisty ending nicely done. Definitely gave me the shivers!

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  8. James McEwan says:

    Psycho all over again, terrifying.

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  9. Damn, I hate when that happens. Nicely done.

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  10. Dayum…hate when that happens!

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  11. I was trying to prepare myself but to no avail. I had shivers at the horror of her opening her own door to the person of her nightmares. Fantastic writing!

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  12. Abhijit Ray says:

    May be tall thin man with a long thin knife is trying to tell something to her. If he wanted to hurt or rob her, he could have done it earlier.

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  13. draliman says:

    Like the repetition. Strange that this lovely picture has almost universally produced darkness and death-dealing stories… 🙂

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  14. wow. Love the repetition here, even if I was expecting the tall thin man, and the long thin knife. Well done, as always!

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  15. You develop and then explode the tension so well in this piece. Such a shame, though, to use such a pretty house for so morbid a tale. But then again, it IS your picture, so …..

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  16. DB McNicol says:

    Creepy, creepy! My story is similar but I refused to read anyone’s until mine was written, so total coincidence. LOL!

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  17. Such a pretty house with a horror tale ending.
    Love the photograph … very, very sweet house.
    Congrats on the photo selection by Ms. Rochelle.
    Isadora 😎

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  18. Liz Young says:

    You built that tension beautifully.

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  19. I would accuse Maxwell Edison, but always uses a silver hammer. Much more dignified.

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  20. Oh christ, thats really evil.Good stiuff

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  21. Nobbinmaug says:

    At least he has follow-through. He will get the job done.

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  22. pennygadd51 says:

    It seems like the woman can’t avoid her fate. Whether that is to kill or be killed is another matter. Chilling story, CE. And thank you for this week’s prompt photo, which I found very inspiring.

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  23. Iain Kelly says:

    Wonder what she had done to upset the tall thin man, or maybe he didn’t need a reason.

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  24. Sandra says:

    Dinner might be a little late this evening, I guess.

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  25. trentpmcd says:

    You see? That’s why she killed you off ! 😉

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  26. granonine says:

    Oh, no! Her worst nightmare coming true! You built this perfectly, step by step—fear, safety, horror! Really well done.

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  27. I’d like to think it was her tall thin husband who’d just been peeling long thin carrots but I fear not. Thanks for the pic.

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  28. This is really scary, C.E. It’s beginning like a great thriller or murder mystery. It seems this guy had been stalking her. A good story and writing. —- Suzanne

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  29. Colline says:

    Oh my word, this is scary!

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  30. Enkin Anthem says:

    Creepy and awesome. Great writing. And thanks for the great picture!

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  31. Tannille says:

    Kinky play, we don’t know about?

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  32. Dear C.E.

    And another one bites the dust. It was Colonel Mustard in the parlor with a long knife. Rhythmic and chilling.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  33. neilmacdon says:

    Lovely repetition. Like a fairy tale

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