Big Wheel – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
his week’s cheery prompt photo comes courtesy of Dale Rogerson.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Dale Rogerson

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

Big Wheel

Fairgrounds are interesting places.
Even gangsters tend to let their guard down a fraction.
Portuguese Tony has a smile and a word for everyone, but his eyes never leave the group ahead.
The Capo is relaxed, having fun with his grandson, but surrounded with bodyguards.
The crowds part, and queues disappear, when he approaches.
Tony speaks into his phone.
The Big Wheel is on the big wheel, he says.
On the balcony of an empty holiday apartment 400 metres away, I groan silently.
Even his accent doesn’t make it funny.
But I raise my rifle, and focus carefully.

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63 Responses to Big Wheel – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Ha. Humor almost like an eyeroll. Love it.


  2. Pow! Right between the eyes!
    He’ll never know what hit him.


  3. Lynn Love says:

    In front of his grandson? Wow, they really want the Capo dead. And the Big Wheel should know, never ever let your guard down, especially if Tony is your enemy. Nice atmosphere C and I like the pun – shows Tony has a sense of humour! Always wary of fairgrounds – too much over the top ‘fun’ to be genuine 🙂


  4. Margaret says:

    I think it’s funny. What a humourless gunman.


  5. Jade Li says:

    like cinema playing in my head. Very well written!


  6. subroto says:

    He better succeed otherwise someone is going to be on a wheelie bin.


  7. Gouy Corine says:

    Est-ce que tu préfères viser la tête ou viser le coeur ? 😎❤


  8. Brilliant, I’m pleased Portugese Tony is here, FF wouldn’t be the same without him!!


  9. 4963andypop says:

    Sounds like Portuguese Tony wants to take the Don’s place. Reminds me of the las vegas sniper-style mass shooting. Hope you stick to just the one hit.


  10. That would be a tough shot, I’d think… but I suppose he’s a professional!

    Great story, I’d love to hear more tales of Portuguese Tony!



  11. Tannille says:

    Chilling… Nowhere to run…


  12. draliman says:

    Eek, imagine being trapped on a big wheel unable to move while someone takes pot shots at you…


  13. Abhijit Ray says:

    Portuguese Tony is now making you do his dirty work! What next?


  14. plaridel says:

    i bet he’ll miss as the wheel keeps on turning distracting his view. 🙂


  15. Sounds like the Big Wheel is about to lose a top banana….


  16. M K Zebra says:

    I like how PT makes the most of every opportunity. Time bonding with family and taking out a competitor – what great multi-tasking!


  17. Love PT… and now you are working as a team… aim well and not for the kid.


  18. Chilling story! Enjoyed it.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos


  19. I look forward to my weekly fix of PT! It wouldn’t be the same without him.


  20. gahlearner says:

    You really have it in for Portuguese Tony. I wonder how he gets out of this.


  21. notestowomen says:

    This sounds like a scene from a movie. It had me riveted from beginning to end.


  22. Dear C.E.

    I wonder if the wheel will start and cause him to miss. That would cause a turn of events, wouldn’t it? Well aimed.




  23. pennygadd51 says:

    The story of Portuguese Tony winds in an unexpected direction. I’m glad you’re retaining him as a character – for the present, at least. The line “Even his accent doesn’t make it funny,” is hilarious!


  24. Sandra says:

    As soon as I saw the title, I knew it was going to be Portuguese Tony. Loved it!


  25. Violet Lentz says:

    Sounds like the big wheel is about to have a fatal flat.

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  26. The last line flipped the scene so well! 😀
    Excellent flash! 🙂


  27. neilmacdon says:

    Tell me you’re not going to kill off Portuguese Tony. He’s appeared before in your stories, hasn’t he?


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