Blaze – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s hand-warming photo
is provided by Anshu Bhojnagarwala.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Anshu Bhojnagarwala

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

Blaze

A pall of black smoke hangs over the port.
The chandler’s shop is ablaze, as is the restaurant beside it.
I stand behind the red and white tape, exchanging theories with Portuguese Tony.
He knows everyone in town.
He is trading information with people on all sides.
Neither he nor his contacts know what happened here today.
I do.
I know who set the fire.
I know that when they find the body there will be confusion.
I don’t know how much, or for how long.
I am unsure just what flames can disguise.
Will they know she was strangled?

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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94 Responses to Blaze – Friday Fictioneers

  1. How does he know.? Is he a witness, or the guilty party?

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  2. Short snappy sentences, lots of detail, questions unanswered, all give us a good story. Well written – loved it

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  3. Portuguese Tony, so as to distinguish him from Italian Tony?

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  4. The calm, unconcerned telling of this gives it just the right atmosphere. I really enjoyed it.

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  5. I was not surprised that the narrator would know. Actually I suspect he frequently knows more than Portuguese Tony, but he doesn’t share. Setting all of those buildings on fire though…that might have been overkill. hahahaha. 😀

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  6. Lynn Love says:

    I love your details in this dark tale, C – the chandler, the restaurant, ‘Portuguese Tony’ (who wouldn’t love a character called that?). They all add texture to this creepy piece. I wonder if your narrator will be caught? Lovely writing

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  7. Margaret says:

    Enticing hints of a bigger story here – I’m betting this girl isn’t the first he’s eliminated. And I’m intrigued by Portuguese Tony. Fabulous.

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  8. I doubt the authorities will suspect foul play. They’re not any brighter than Tony.
    Next time just give the girl a knock-out drug and let the fire kill her. Then there’d be less to worry about.

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  9. Corine Gouy says:

    💟🧢

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  10. granonine says:

    Oooooooh. creepy 🙂

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  11. 4963andypop says:

    Once again we are in the dubious position of being your character’s confessors. I wonder how your character will manage to get away with it, although clearly, Firewill hide a number of sins.

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  12. I’ve heard it said, the guilty returns to the scene of the crime. A little bit edgy maybe or just curious. An entertaining, expertly woven, tale! =)

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  13. gahlearner says:

    Great atmosphere and voice. If she’s unimportant enough he may just get away with it. I think they can detect if smoke was inhaled. But I’m not sure.

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  14. From your well crafted, but dark stories, one can only surmise that your velvety voice hides the potential for something more sinister. As always, well done, C.E.

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  15. Light and dark. Hmmmm.
    Sinister!

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  16. Abhijit Ray says:

    Ah, the killer knows what happened. Now he is eager to find out more. From a charred body it may be difficult to find out strangulation marks.

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  17. He can always strangle the Forensics team too 🙂

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  18. Joy Pixley says:

    Ew, another murderer hoping to get away with it — I hope they catch him! Perhaps Portuguese Tony knows more than he’s letting on.

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  19. Nan Falkner says:

    Portuguese Tony – what a clever name! Enjoyable and a very clever story! Well done!

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  20. Oooh that’s good, I love Portuguese Tony, I reckon he’s not cleaner than clean either

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  21. This really makes me want to read more, the suspense is superb

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  22. You will be found out I think… you should take down Tony too… he knows more than he tells.

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  23. michael1148humphris says:

    You had me wondering why she had to die, I guess we will never know

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  24. Indira says:

    Superb writing. I wonder what goes on in your head.

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  25. pennygadd51 says:

    Super write, CE! You give plenty of specific details that both make the scene vivid and add verisimilitude to the narrative. I’m with Rochelle – one of your best stories yet!

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  26. Liz Young says:

    He hasn’t got long – they will work it out.

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  27. An anxious few days lay ahead. I won’t tell.

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  28. Sandra says:

    Portuguese Tony… a masterful touch. If anyone has the inside track a man with name like that will have it. Your narrator would do well to keep in touch. Good one.

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  29. Dear C.E.

    One of your finest murders to date.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  30. Anita says:

    He strangled her & then set fire to cover up his murder.
    There is a Hindi movie in which this takes place. The police later discover that he is the killer as her ghost comes to testify the murder. They find her skeleton beneath the chandelier…
    I feel karma catches up and people will get punished for their wrong doings.
    Well expressed.
    The Night of Bonfire – Anita

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  31. A mystery – good one!

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  32. jillyfunnell says:

    I love the name Portuguese Tony – I could instantly see him. Best to keep on his nice side, I imagine.

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  33. Violet Lentz says:

    I’m with Iain. If Portuguese Tony can play both ends against the middle he’s no dummy. Excellent write CE.

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  34. Varad says:

    He does go over the top to cover up one teensy murder, eh?

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  35. emmylgant says:

    Tight tale, complete with misdirection and a not quite finished business…
    Good stuff.

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  36. Iain Kelly says:

    Portuguese Tony will figure it out eventually, of this I am sure. And then what price to keep his secret safe?

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  37. neilmacdon says:

    For some reason I was really tickled by the chandler’s shop

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