Hotel Room – Sunday Photo Fiction

Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) inspired by what you see in the picture (below).
This week’s prompt
comes from J Hardy Carroll.
Click on this link to enter your tale, and to see what others have written.

© J Hardy Carroll


Click here to hear the author read his words:

Hotel Room

The problem with hotel rooms is that you never know who is next door.
Especially when you are in a casino hotel on an Indian Reservation.
The music thunders through the wall.
I groan, check the time.
3.17 a.m.
‘Stay there, sweetie,’ my wife says, ‘I’ll call reception.’
She slams the phone down
abruptly.
I look at her in amazement.
‘High rollers,’ she snaps, ‘
Reception say they can’t do anything until the manager gets here in the morning.’
The room is still vibrating.
I groan
again, roll out of bed.
I dress, knock on next door.
I see a music device, surprisingly small for the din it creates.
The guy laughs in my face.
I show him my badge.
‘Get lost, detective, you have no authority here on the
Res.’
H
is friends gather round, hurling insults.
I take out my gun, shoot the speaker.
Not the guy doing the talking,
the thing making the noise.
‘Do I need to shoot anything else?’ I ask the stunned faces.
The speaker shakes his head.
The guy doing the talking, not the
thing making much less noise.
I go back to bed in blissful silence.
The problem with hotel rooms is that you never know who is next door.

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23 Responses to Hotel Room – Sunday Photo Fiction

  1. Ha ha ha ha ha. I absolutely loved what you did there. Such a smart little tale.

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  2. Mandie Hines says:

    I liked the repetition of the line that began the story at the end. I also enjoyed the clarification of which speaker the narrator was referring to. Very funny. A satisfying conclusion to the situation, shooting the speaker. Now hopefully he can get some rest.

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  3. JS Brand says:

    I expect that’s how Dirty Harry would have resolved noise complaints if he’d been an Environmental Health Officer. Very cleverly written CE.

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  4. Penny L Howe says:

    Definitely an excellent “sound bite” when it comes to silencing sound!

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    • ceayr says:

      Well, well, what a delightful surprise to see you here, my dear Penny.
      I am glad my little story amused you, but when are you going to treat us to a tale of your own, it has been far too long.
      My love to all, as always.

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  5. Joy Pixley says:

    Ha ha, clever! I liked the double use of the line about not knowing who’s next door, Clearly that applied to both rooms, in this case!

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  6. Reena Saxena says:

    Strategic move 🙂

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  7. Well done! Rhythmic creaking, loud snoring, thumping music – I’ve put up with my fair share during my travels – and that’s in my room!

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  8. Iain Kelly says:

    Oh yes, many of us would like to be able to deal with noisy neighbours like this. Loved the ‘speakers’ duality.

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  9. michael1148humphris says:

    Loved the story, it felt like it could grow, almost like the start of a film

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  10. Oh, this is something we so wanted to do to inconsiderate neighbours some years back!

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