Night Noise – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s melodic masterpiece is by Jan, her other half, or perhaps, given her diminutive stature, three quarters.
It set me dancing under the stars.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture, below.

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© Jan W. Fields

Night Noise

Every night has its own sounds.
Internal noises, the creak of the water pipes, the groan of the heating system.
Sometimes the drip of a tap, difficult to ignore.
And the external distractions common to apartment blocks everywhere.
The click of heels in a corridor, the music of a long-dead jazz pianist, doors being closed too loudly.
Through the shutters comes the wail of a cat.
A motorbike engine sixty metres away drowns out the wind, now rustling silently through the pines.
Normally none of this has anything to do with me.
But tonight, I realise with horror, something does.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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62 Responses to Night Noise – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Utterly creepy! I really loved the way in which you built up the sounds (and I’ve paid attention to sounds my whole life, so this really reeled me in) to a fever pitch, and did it all in this tight, controlled fashion.

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  2. I really want to know…that is

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  3. Oh i really which one of those noises launches the rest of the story.

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  4. Dee says:

    Oh, well done CE. I like the way you set out a string of ordinary occurrences , then build them up into something really scary.

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  5. Checkii says:

    Very intriguing indeed. You have ignited my imagination, and that last line too leaves much to ponder on.

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  6. Margaret says:

    Brrrr! Get out of there while you can. Great atmosphere and an intriguing ending.

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  7. oh dear! Now I wonder which could be the one? Hopefully it is simply the wailing cat..let him and feed him, already!

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  8. ooh-err! Creepy…..I was woken by a creaking noise the other night, and realised it was my aging bones!

    Visit Keith’s Ramblings!

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  9. aFrankAngle says:

    Wonderful imagery, yet a creepy ending that makes me wonder what happened.

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  10. Oh boy, I’m afraid you’re dead! Great building of suspense from what I though was going to be about your calling the landlord for better soundproofing to what I fear is visit from the Grim Dude. Great story.

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  11. Bloggeuse says:

    Fabulous little story – very atmospheric!

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  12. Wow! And what happens next? Don’t tell me.

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  13. Trouble has come knocking on his doors.
    very intriguing piece.

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  14. ansumani says:

    Wow – Fabulously creepy! Well done.

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  15. plaridel says:

    an increasing sense of awareness. something’s about to happen i just couldn’t figure out what.

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  16. lillian says:

    “The click of heels in a corridor, the music of a long-dead jazz pianist, doors being closed too loudly.” This line is ominous…..I’m shuddering by the end! You started with a mundane description and the deeper we go, the deeper we get into the macabre, the possibility of the dark side! Well done!

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  17. My imagination just went into to overdrive!

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  18. A really great, atmospheric write. I felt like I was hanging on by my fingertips at the end, desperate to know what happened next.

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  19. mandibelle16 says:

    I wonder what he hears that has to do with him. Nice write.

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  20. Wonderful scene and mood setting.

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  21. Indira says:

    Beautiful beginning. Slowly we get accustomed to these sounds. The last line makes me read more of this.

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  22. Something wicked this way comes. Like Bjorn said, made my spine tingle just a little.

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  23. gahlearner says:

    This makes me shudder. I like all of your stories, but this is one of my favs. It’s the unspoken that brings the horror.

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  24. Dale says:

    This was fabulous, CE! I love how you created the atmosphere that brought me back to my first apartment. All those strange, new sounds, so different from the ones I had left behind at my parent’s… And, now that my situation in my home has changed, I hear sounds I never did before…

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  25. Graham Lawrence says:

    I need a checklist!

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  26. Oh this is just amazing.. has to be one of my favorites from you… Love where you took it.. and that last sentence just made something crawl along my spine…

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  27. Who is coming for you? Pretty intense and i like it.

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  28. So atmospheric. Really enjoyed it.

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  29. emmylgant says:

    Monsters just came out from under the bed…. tailor-made to the reader’s phantasm. Brrrr.
    I really enjoy the build up to the last line.
    Comme d’hab, n’est ce pas?

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  30. Sandra says:

    The best horrors are those unspoken horrors that the mind can conjure up. You know this only too well. Well done.

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  31. Dear CE,

    If I heard those house noises every night I’d be looking for another place to live. Ominous ending. I just pulled my covers over my head.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • ceayr says:

      Don’t all dwellings have their own unique sounds?
      Ominous is good.
      And covers do not keep the monsters away.
      If you are the nervous type, please don’t read the previous sentence.

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  32. Corina says:

    And now I want to read more about this one night!

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