Car Park – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
Her own somewhat dreich image almost makes me feel homesick.
Almost.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture, below.

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Car Park

My mates slap me on the back, full of congratulations.
I am outside the little café in the square, displaying the stuff.
St Tropez, they say, admiringly, you have cojones!
Thing is, I have technology.
I can break into any car.
So I did the parking lot in the richest town on the coast.
The haul is amazing.
I see the little man watching.
He looks insignificant, even nervous.
What, I ask him, aggressively.
Anything nice for a lady, he asks.
It’ll cost you, I smirk.
No, he says, it won’t.
His finger is on the trigger.
Wrong car, sonny.

St Tropez by C. E. Ayr

St Tropez by C. E. Ayr

 

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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60 Responses to Car Park – Friday Fictioneers

  1. A life of crime is always a risk. 😉

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  3. creeepy as ever….only takes one bad guy to meet a worse one for an excellent story

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  4. Hazards of the job, I suppose.

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  5. Corina says:

    Sounds like part of a great story!

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  6. mjlstories says:

    They say it’s the quiet ones you need to watch out for… Good story.

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  7. charlypriest says:

    I´m canceling my trip to St. Tropez after reading this

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  8. k rawson says:

    Uh oh, that took a wrong turn. Nicely done.

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  9. What do you say to a small insignificant man with his finger on a trigger?

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  10. That actually struck a chill in my heart. Very well-done, Ceayr!

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  11. Be careful where you steal from, right?

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  12. plaridel says:

    a lesson learned too late.

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  13. Ooohh, he got his come uppin’s didn’t he? Well done.

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  14. elmowrites says:

    Oops! Sounds like our man is about to learn about karma.

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  15. It sounds like it rained on your man’s parade.

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  16. Sandra says:

    The little insignificant man is about to assume very significant proportions. Nice take on the prompt. St Tropez looks …. wealthy.

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  17. Ouch.. always check for Cosa Nostra vanity plates before breaking into a car.

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  18. Excellent! Didn’t see that coming!

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  19. This played like a mini movie. Well done.

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  20. Dale says:

    I love how you take us along for a ride onle to put on the breaks. As always, well done!

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  21. Thank God you lived to tell the tale 🙂 Nice!!!

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  22. Graham Lawrence says:

    Well imagined! Nice tasteful use of language!

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  23. emmylgant says:

    Oooh I like this one. Perfect pitch.

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  24. Dear CE,

    Oops. Sounds like he’s met his match.
    He really needs to live around here. I have a penchant for locking my keys in my car. 😉 Where’s a break in artist when you need one?
    Well written with just the right touch of humor.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • ceayr says:

      Glad you enjoyed, m’lady.
      Down in the Florida Keys there is at least one guy who makes a living by opening cars for tourists who do what you do.
      He took about 40 seconds and charged me 60 bucks.

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  25. micklively says:

    Good atmosphere CEA

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  26. Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
    AnElephantCant think of Scotland without shivering
    It is cold and it’s dank and it’s wet
    He remembers vast lochs and great glens
    Purple heather on high bens
    But the weather he tries to forget

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    • mjlstories says:

      Dear Elephant – my favouritest train journey in all the world is out of King Cross and uphill all the way North to Waverley Station, but it is true last time I took that train it started to rain just past York.

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