I used to know AnElephant
Who wrote in silly verse
So I thought I’d just eliminate him
Before things get any worse
Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) – what I call Sound Bite Fiction – inspired by what you see in Al’s great picture (below).
Click on this link to enter your tale, and see what others have written.
Copyright Al Forbes
The Mistake
I sit outside the little café in the square, barefoot, in shorts and t-shirt.
I am comfortable in my own world.
As the sun drops behind the parasol pines, two limos draw up.
From the first, two large suits in sunglasses get out.
Quickly, methodically, they scan the area, then move to the second car, standing on either side of the rear door.
The chauffeur opens it, and a corpulent figure in gaudy beach shirt and too much jewellery gets out.
He stretches, ignoring the woman whose shapely limbs precede her from the vehicle.
Before her face is visible, I know it is her.
He sees me, points, laughing.
Look, honey, the beach bum, your youthful mistake!
A shadow flickers across her eyes; pity, or fear, perhaps.
Still laughing, arms wide, he moves towards me.
I rise, pushing my notebook into my rucksack.
I have waited several years for this moment.
With my hand still hidden, I put a bullet in the middle of his smug fat face.
Dear C.E.
With that moment of satisfaction behind him, I’d say he’ll have another long wait behind bars.
Well done. You have such a flowery romantic way of bumping people off.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, Rochelle.
Have you not realised that I am a flowery romantic sort of guy?
That is a killer last line! It conrasts wonderfully with the softness of the rest of the story. I enjoyed!
Thank you again, Donna.
I do like to leave my reader reeling slightly.
Very glad you enjoyed.
Ooooh, this was dramatic!
Drama is my middle name.
Well, clearly it isn’t, as it doesn’t start with an ‘E’.
I am pleased you enjoyed my short tale.
I just don’t like to be interrupted when I am chilling!
You look rather forbidding, yes.
Surely not!
Perhaps you would prefer a large pink pachyderm?
No fondness for large pink pachyderms. I just combined your comment with your small photo and drew my conclusion, wrong or right. Most men are quite intimidating, in my estimation.
Oh Dell, surely not.
I like to think I am intimidating only in my writing.
And never to a lady.
Although I have to agree that I am not very photogenic.
Bless your heart, Sir–there’s no issue about whether you’re photogenic or not; having had too many bad experiences, I’m easily intimidated by males–I try to not paint them all with the same broad/black brush, and I rarely confess my bias–so something must have made me feel I could speak forthrightly to you. Your comment actually made my day–I feel like curtsying! (And shielding my blush with a fan…)
I can’t think of AnElephantCant comment.
But your story is a fine accomplishment.
DJ
AnElephantCant deserve a comment!
Good to see you here, Danny.
My pleasure.
DJ
love this! Such a great twist at the end
I am happy to hear that, dear lady.
Thank you for your comment.
You can find another tale, which I read, under Current Story.
Although not the discreetest of methods, that is one way to get rid of them.
As they say in the movies, a man’s gotta do…
If you have 90 seconds, please check out my reading under Current Story.
Did not expect that great ending
Delighted to hear that, Donna.
Hopefully another surprise waiting to be read and heard under Current Story.
AnElephantCant be disposed of
No ink assassin has such might
M. Ayr should be warned
Elephant shouldn’t be scorned
His trumpet’s bigger than a sound bite
I HAD to do it! You limerick and my limerick synapse just does that thing 🙂
AnElephantCant write forever
The old pachyderm has run out of breath
But even C.E. Ayr
Would never dare
To condemn the pink plodder to death
Good way to get rid of a hoodlum. Loved the story.
Thank you, dear Joy, always so supportive.
Please don’t miss my reading under Current Story.
Wasn’t expecting that!
Happy to surprise you, Roger.
Have you listened to the reading under Current Story?
Went back and found it. Enjoyable!
Oh! Such sweet revenge!
A dish to be enjoyed regardless of temperature.
Please take a moment to hear my reading under Current Story, just 90 seconds.
A lovely story with a conclusion that only A.E.C or C.E.A. could come up with! Be well… ^..^
Thank you, Babs, you are too kind.
Very happy you enjoyed this story.
Please take a moment to listen to the reading under Current Story.
I will do that later today!
It certainly has bite! Great read. 🙂
Eventually one has to show one’s teeth, Steve!
How I love this little café in the square!
Every day an adventure; you know what you see when you get there but you never know what you’re gonna get: ceayr or AnElephant?
The surprise is certain…
In the end, either one will make your day!
The little café in the square is a source of inspiration and adventure.
And cool refreshing drinks too!
Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
AnElephantCant be eliminated
He is not easily scared
But he has an addiction
To Sound Bite Fiction
As created by C.E. Ayr
AnElephantCant be unkind, I guess
Even when he is being left behind, I jest
Perhaps we
Can agree
That our efforts can be combined, no less?
WOW! What an inspiration. Thank you dear Ceayr, have a nice day, love, nia
My dear Nia, you, and your so supportive comments, are the true inspiration for any writer.
Thank you.
Dear Ceayr, I love this language and I love beautiful people in this language… sometimes it can not be easy to understand for me, but I try to understand. And then I love to share my feelings and thoughts… Thats all. You are so nice. Welcome, and Thanks, love, nia
Your feelings and thoughts are always welcome here, dear Nia.
Thank you.