Exposed – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant contain himself
It is Friday Fictioneer time again
He must write a short tale
On a very small scale
He makes notes with his best fountain pen

What on earth can he find to say this week
What if he finds that he has writer’s block
That would be a pain
So to clear his poor brain
It makes sense to first go for a walk

The idea is to write a very short story based on a picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright -Douglas M. MacIlroy

Copyright -Douglas M. MacIlroy

He smiles to himself, although his heart is breaking.

How could that stupid, treacherous fool do that to the woman he loved?
The woman they both loved.

He does not know who tipped off the police, but they are everywhere.
They search the house, the barns, the outbuildings.
They know something is amiss.

The brute just stands there, pretending innocence, radiating grief.
While the third side of the triangle, her sister, dabs at her eyes with a scented handkerchief.

Time for action.
He moves the hosepipe, so that the water pours into the freshly dug ground, washing away the topsoil.

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About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered peace in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte Vermeille, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random. So, nobody’s perfect.
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72 Responses to Exposed – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Fantastic. Even without the pay-off, I loved the idea of altruistic pro bono security guards.

  2. annisik51's avatar annisik51 says:

    I like your use of ‘triangle’: in this case the eternal ‘ménage à trois’.

  3. kdillmanjones's avatar kdillmanjones says:

    Creative story from the prompt!

  4. Oh that’s a smart horse 🙂

  5. Oooo..I love it!

  6. Clever horse. And I thought he was watering the lawn!

  7. Shreyank's avatar Shreyank says:

    Kudos on ur story and a bigger kudos to jules and you on the poetry routine ! enjoyed it 🙂

    • AnElephantCant hide his dismay here
      He spends several days creating his story
      Then in a brief flake of time
      Lovely Jules with a rhyme
      Steps in and steals all AnElephant’s glory!

      But, seriously (really?), very glad you enjoyed your visit.

      • Shreyank's avatar Shreyank says:

        anelephant has met a formidable oponent
        anelephant trumpets loud and hard, but cant shake jules away
        we now know shreyank cant even make up a nursery ryhme
        and hence enjoys(really!) the banter of anelephants an’ jules ryhmes ! 🙂

        btw he also likes anelephant’s story ! 🙂

        • AnElephantCant thank Shreyank enough
          His words really are pretty cool
          AnElephant is rather inept
          And out of his depth
          When he tries to swap rhymes with sweet Jules

  8. Wonderful story. I love the depth of emotion of all involved.

  9. Beth Carter's avatar Beth Carter says:

    Wickedly nice and the start to a longer short story. Well done.

  10. elappleby's avatar elappleby says:

    Very very cleverly written. The story trips along nicely revealing the clues along the way. I especially like ‘the third side of the triangle’. Brilliant.

  11. Joe Owens's avatar Joe Owens says:

    The murderer never imagined the horse would be the weakest link of his plan.

  12. denmother's avatar denmother says:

    Never underestimate a horse. I enjoyed how you cleverly wove him into the tale.
    Denmother

  13. zookyworld's avatar zookyworld says:

    What a neat story you came up with for this photo. And such a clever horse!

  14. Dear Elephant,
    Quite a tale, or is that tail, you’ve woven. A good ride and a good read.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  15. nightlake's avatar nightlake says:

    Brilliant! Clever horse.

  16. indytony's avatar indytony says:

    Well conceived and crafted. I particularly enjoyed your rhyming intro.

  17. zennjennc's avatar zennjennc says:

    Loyal horse

  18. julespaige's avatar julespaige says:

    Glory in Gory

    AnElephantCant say he isn’t clever
    To tell a mystery in one hundred words
    The horse content to expose the fiends
    Greedy ‘bird’ and fella won’t get all the beans
    Thank goodness the prompt was not of birds

    As I imagine them, the sky full of vultures
    Worse than ducks a squawking
    Police, Detectives and M.E. too –
    Body’ll be less a few pieces parts for you…
    Lady fingers for dinner – those scavengers are stalking!

    ©JP/davh

    🙂

  19. jwdwrites's avatar jwdwrites says:

    Very good! Great use of what wasn’t said. I loved the horse washing away the top soil. With any luck they will find her and he will get what he deserves. I am guessing that the sister was involved?

  20. elmowrites's avatar elmowrites says:

    Sounds like this triangle was actually a square! Glad the brute will get his justdesserts.

  21. animals are so smart, love this tale.

  22. Penny L Howe's avatar Penny L Howe says:

    Wow, just brilliant, what a clever idea for the photo prompt! 🙂 xx

  23. Sandra's avatar Sandra says:

    What a great idea! Well done

  24. An elephant writing about a horse who’s about to uncover a murder. Now that’s something!

    janet

  25. Nice twist for the photo prompt.

  26. kz's avatar kz says:

    clever horse ^^ clever tale ^^ well done

  27. emmylgant's avatar emmylgant says:

    …He knows where all the bodies are buried. Very imaginative and ingenious.
    Formidable!

  28. dhparker's avatar dhparker says:

    Impressive!

  29. ohhh I cannot wait until the second chapter of this mystery! 😉

  30. Alastair's avatar Alastair says:

    Cool. I like that

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