Secrecy – Carrot Ranch

Artwork by Phil Burns

The Carrot Ranch Challenge:
In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story inspired by “Secrets”.

Click here to hear the author read his words:

Secrecy

You said it was love at first sight, but I’m not sure even you believed that.
I think it was more about lust, about the secrecy and the excitement of stolen moments – forbidden afternoons in cheap hotel rooms, on a blanket on that secluded beach, or even in the back of your new car – that put two marriages at risk.
Well, neither marriage survived when your brakes ‘inexplicably’ failed as you swept into the always deserted car-park above the gorge.
I met his wife at the funerals, of course.
She seems nice, and in need of comfort…

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About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered peace in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte Vermeille, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random. So, nobody’s perfect.
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23 Responses to Secrecy – Carrot Ranch

  1. What a fine fellow, this narrator. Even as he mourns his own wife he is willing to comfort the new widow.
    Well done, this.

  2. Gloria's avatar Gloria says:

    All wrapped up nicely in 99 words!

  3. Great twist at the end, CE. Cleverly written.

  4. Cassa Bassa's avatar Cassa Bassa says:

    They deserved it….perhaps…

  5. Liz H's avatar Liz H says:

    A twist, so well done and so naughty to boot!

  6. jenne49's avatar jenne49 says:

    Funny how loud inverted commas can shout in changing the thrust of a story.
    And how much information can be contained in 99 words.
    A wry tale with a satisfyingly twisted ending.
    Love it.

  7. Oh so typically you, CE, with that neat little twist at the end that sneaks up and grabs you by the (fill in body part here).
    Something tells me the widow won’t be lonely for long.
    Well done, dear boy.

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