Sid Shovel – Six Sentence Story

Copyright C. E. Ayr

This challenge is produced by GirlieOnTheEdge with the following simple rules:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word – EXPRESS

Click here to hear the author read his words:

Sid Shovel, Private Eye

When she undulates into my office my eyes decide to pop out, just to get nearer to her.

This dame has a body that can stop an express train going down a mountain so, when she sits and crosses her long, slender, nylon-clad legs, I imagine everything from our first date to the grandchildren visiting, with a few pretty memorable highlights included, by the time she finishes.

She puts a cheque on my desk, the number of zeroes reminding me of my favourite football team’s recent goal-scoring record.

Then she starts to talk, explaining her problem in minute detail and at great length.

When she eventually stops, she studies me for a few moments before asking what I think.

I blink at her a few times, shake my head rapidly from side to side, and tell her ‘I’m sorry, I was a bit distracted, I really wasn’t listening.’

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22 Responses to Sid Shovel – Six Sentence Story

  1. Liz H says:

    That first sentence was a tell-all, but it kept getting better and better, right to the final punchline.

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  2. clark says:

    Dude!*
    Too many lines echoing from the masters, i.e. Chandler, Hammett…Spillain
    Fun Six

    * compliment on a six pack of pulp fiction, my favorite genre

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  3. I came pretty close to that when I was an automotive sales virtuoso – I sold her a motor and got a date!

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  4. Chris Hall says:

    I imagine that happens to her a lot! Fun Six 🙂

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  5. Lol. I’m sure he won’t mind having her begin all over again 🙂

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  6. Sam Spade with hormone-induced Alzheimers. Loved it,

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  7. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice description of the fantasy of her in those first two sentences completely explaining the distraction in the last sentence.

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  8. jenne49 says:

    I’m laughing here.
    I can just picture this, you capture the tone and the time.
    And I have a vivid picture of him blinking as he realises she’s stopped talking…

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