Hospital – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below, which this week is supplied by Sandra Crook.

© Sandra Crook

Click here to hear the author read his words:


I awaken in hospital, hearing voices.
…white van…terrible conditions…head on…
Gradually I discover what happened.
Apparently I’ve been in a coma for several weeks.
My wife has already been buried.
Here, in France.
This hurts me.
She wanted to be beside her family in Ayrshire.
She adored Provence, we had many happy years on the Côte d’Azur.
But it is still foreign soil.
I spend two months in therapy, learning to walk again.
Finally I am well enough to leave.
I hire a car to drive back to Scotland.
And I buy two things.
A large suitcase.
And a spade.

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48 Responses to Hospital – Friday Fictioneers

  1. There is such a huge difference between reading and then hearing your voice reading what I am seeing. I love this story.

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  2. I think he’ll need more than a suitcase for what he’s got in mind.

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  3. robprice59 says:

    Why do we care where our bones lie? Good piece.


  4. Better hope he doesn’t get stopped at customs. Great story!


  5. plaridel says:

    why take the risk? i’m sure it can be handled legally. just a thought.


  6. trishsplace says:

    Aah. Thoughtful of him. Loving.


  7. Anita says:

    He is respecting his last wife’s wish, right?
    Good husband.
    But, what if he is caught while exhuming remains and trying to carry her remains in the suitcase?
    Cross-country border checks!


  8. draliman says:

    Looks like his wife’s coming home.


  9. pennygadd51 says:

    Hoo, that’s one determined chap! Very well told tale, CE.


  10. Dora says:

    Sounds like he has a good plan, and the job needs to be done for his own peace of mind. All the details, all the emotions, open the character’s mindset right up for us.


  11. That’s definitely the solution!


  12. I guess it’s worth the risk. I won’t tell a soul.


  13. Iain Kelly says:

    It’s a dirty job, but… let’s hope he doesn’t get stopped at customs in Calais.


  14. elmowrites says:

    I like that ending, although I wonder if there ought to have been some mental therapy as well as the physical side.


  15. Someone is most certainly quite determined. Can an amateur do the job?


  16. oldentimes says:

    great ending! May you finish your task!


  17. I hope he manages to fulfil his rescue mission.


  18. granonine says:

    Ah. I love that ending.


  19. A person’s gotta do what a person’s gotta do …
    Nicely done!


  20. Those last lines got me! Excellent take on the photo prompt, CE.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos


  21. Sandra says:

    The man is all heart. I like a guy for whom nothing is too much trouble. You made me grin.


  22. Dear CE,

    Her wishes will be carried out at last…if he doesn’t get arrested. Odd, yet poignant story.




  23. Tannille says:

    If you want something done right, do it yourself…


  24. neilmacdon says:

    Some things just have to be finished right


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