On Ice – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below, which this week is supplied by Dale Rogerson.

© Dale Rogerson

Click here to hear the author read his words:

On Ice

I watch her skate across the frozen loch.
There are hundreds of people out there, young and old.
But she stands out.
It is not just her long dark hair, billowing around her head like a swirling storm of protective bees.
Or the effortless elegance of her style, so unlike the frenzied arm-pumping of the majority.
No, she radiates beauty from her eyes, her soul.
She glides near to where I stand, treats me to a glorious smile.
Someone at my shoulder moves forward.
They embrace.
I remember now.
I lost her here, many years ago.
When the ice broke.

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44 Responses to On Ice – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Michael says:

    Broken ice, broken dreams, wishing you well


  2. 4963andypop says:

    Love the hair like a swarm of bees. This was beautifully done. But you could not resist an element of the macabre, could you?😊


  3. She stands out so clearly – I really like the immediacy of her presence.


  4. A tale that took us from joy to heartbreak in a few sentences.


  5. James McEwan says:

    Where love and loss combine – the location becomes an emotional and evocative pilgrimage _ a place of joy and tears.


  6. Lynn Love says:

    Oh, you’re killing me! That was so beautifully described – love those protective bees – then you snatch all that hope and beauty away and drown it.. Very, very you, C 🙂 Hope you and yours have a fantastic Christmas


  7. You described her so well I felt his loss at the end. Brilliant writing, CE. I hope you have a wonderful holiday!


  8. draliman says:

    Wistful and sad. Nicely written!


  9. Liz Young says:

    You’ve drawn a lovely picture then hit us with desperate loss. Well done.


  10. pennygadd51 says:

    Oh! So sad! Your story is beautifully paced, and paints a vivid picture.


  11. siobhan1967 says:

    Beautifully described – I liked the swirling storm of bees, great image. Some sad stories this week.


  12. granonine says:

    You have set this up with great finesse, ending on such a deeply tragic note. Well done.


  13. Anita says:

    Sad loss.
    Memories & pain still exist.
    Beautifully expressed.


  14. Oy. So so heartbreaking. Like the ice. Swallowing the joy.
    Well written as always, Ceayr!
    Happy Holidays and may there be no losses, on or off the ice … Na’ama


  15. Dale says:

    Such beautiful descriptions… and then. sigh.
    Lovely write, however.


  16. Dear CE,

    I love the hair billowing around her . Lovely images, tragic ending. Nicely done.




  17. neilmacdon says:

    Bleak and harrowing, CE. Beautifully done


  18. Tannille says:

    Ouch. Moving. Reminded me of Iain’s story. Both hauntingly sad. Memories can be sweet and cruel.


  19. Iain Kelly says:

    Exquisite as always. I saw something similar of loss in the picture. Have a great Christmas and New Year CE – Joyeux Noel!


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