The House – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
And this week she also provides her own somewhat austere photo as the prompt.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

The House

They say the house is haunted.
But who believes that stuff nowadays?
Not a sceptic like me, certainly.
I was always quite cynical, even before that competitive little thug from Marseille put a bullet in my head.
It is amazing what you learn when you are dead.
Like the truth about ghosts.
Do you know there is no limbo as we understand it?
No, there are houses like this one where it seems that the souls of the wicked just hang around, ineffectual, impotent, invisible.
And over a period of time they rot away, quite painfully, until there’s nothing left.

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About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered peace in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte Vermeille, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random. So, nobody’s perfect.
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58 Responses to The House – Friday Fictioneers

  1. An interesting take on purgatory? Or is that more of a limbo?
    Hell?
    Definitely a thought provoking tale.

  2. lisarey1990's avatar lisarey1990 says:

    Wonderfully thought-provoking.

  3. Really enjoyed this thought-provoking somber tale. My favorite line is, “It is amazing what you learn when you are dead.” Not sure why, unless it’s because we won’t truly know (we only have shadowy ideas) until it happens.

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      That’s why it’s fun to write about the afterlife, no one can say it isn’t so. And if my story provoked a thought, Brenda, then I am content.

  4. Poor ghosts 🙁

  5. Quite a character sketch of the narrator. Well done!

  6. A great tale and really thought provoking, it might just be the truth…

  7. Quite reasonable to assume that souls would have a half-life. Nicely done.

  8. Had me chuckling at the word twists and idea horrors – so word perfectly done and great for all those who are skeptics and perhaps a bit cynical as well; absolutely great tone and flavour in this short but delightful piece; I always appreciate it when your mind runs far and wide from the “predictable” reading of an image ~ Cheers!

  9. pennygadd51's avatar pennygadd51 says:

    The competitive male – nothing but trouble. Sorry you’re feeling rotten, CE! 😉

  10. subroto's avatar subroto says:

    Rotting souls takes it to a whole new level. Nicely done.

  11. 4963andypop's avatar 4963andypop says:

    Apparently there is such a thing as self-skepticism, being skepticall about your own existence. Existentialism in ghosts?

    Love the fitting punishment, that thugs like him should have to do nothing, cause no mayhem, make no impact at all, for all eternity, or at least until complete putrification sets in.

    Competitive thugs–after watching the Netflix series Marseille, I can imagine the place crawling with such people. 😊

  12. Abhijit Ray's avatar Abhijit Ray says:

    Now do you believe in a haunted house? You are living in it.

  13. StuHN's avatar StuHN says:

    Makes me wonder what evil he had done IRL. Skepticism is not in my book, but…

  14. JS Brand's avatar JS Brand says:

    A great potted horror tale, CE. I imagined you wearing a smoking jacket and clutching a brandy while reading it by a crackling fire.

  15. granonine's avatar granonine says:

    Rotting souls. What a horrific concept. How long does it take, and do the souls know they are rotting away? Ew.

  16. Then I can understand the moaning from my attic… what’s the smell of rotting souls.

  17. I never thought the incorporeal folk were capable of rotting, unless it’s in some way other than we know of.

  18. Prior...'s avatar Prior... says:

    eerie and perfect for October

  19. Sandra's avatar Sandra says:

    A painfully rotting soul sounds… well… painful. I prefer not to consider that possibility. Well done.

  20. Reena Saxena's avatar Reena Saxena says:

    Painful indeed!

  21. Spooky tale.

  22. michael1148humphris's avatar michael1148humphris says:

    You did not let me down, for as I said to Neil and Iain, this prompt can offer horrors galore. Rotting away painfully finished the story nicely

  23. Iain Kelly's avatar Iain Kelly says:

    Being shot in the head doesn’t sound fun, being a ghost even less so. Haunting, atmospheric take CE, warming up for Halloween nicely!

  24. jillyfunnell's avatar jillyfunnell says:

    And when I look again it’s changed from truth to reality via Anita’s comment. I equally love the truth about ghosts. I think both phrases would make good titles for something.

  25. jillyfunnell's avatar jillyfunnell says:

    The reality of ghosts – love that phrase.

  26. Anita's avatar Anita says:

    Haunted home.
    When a skeptical person learns about the reality of ghosts and then shares. Never thought they “rot away”…

  27. neilmacdon's avatar neilmacdon says:

    Loved this take on haunting

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