Legacy – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s prompt comes from Sandra Crook, a magician with a keyboard.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Sandra Crook

Click here to hear the author read his story:

 


Legacy

My brother is not pleased to see me.
He thinks the elder son should inherit everything.
My father left us equal shares.
The family home is without electricity, undergoing renovation.
I head upstairs, even in pitch darkness I can find my old room.
As I feel my way along the corridor I think of Kidnapped, by the wonderful Robert Louis Stevenson.
In a similar situation the hero’s life is saved by a flash of lightning.
I proceed on hands and knees, find the missing floorboards.
I drop my travel bag through the hole, and scream.
And hear my brother’s laughter.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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46 Responses to Legacy – Friday Fictioneers

  1. What a relationship! I daresay the father pitted one against the other from the beginning.

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  2. “Not pleased” is putting it mildly. I would suggest a large torch (flashlight in the U.S.). Take the money and run would also be a suggestion. Good writing, as usual, C.E. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  3. Brothers are the best 😉

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  4. Dale says:

    What is it about brothers and not being able to get along? This rivalry has been going on forever and will till one of ’em kicks the bucket, eh?

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  5. rgayer55 says:

    My eldest brother had a problem too. And, he was gullible and easily tricked as well.

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  6. draliman says:

    I can see this game of cat and mouse lasting a while. Nice one!

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  7. subroto says:

    Sibling rivalry goes up a notch in this story. I can imagine the elder brother going ‘muahaha’ 😉

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  8. Lynn Love says:

    It’s true, some brothers really do hate each other – I’ve come across it myself – and perhaps the death of one is the only answer. I wonder who will win and will the younger sibling get his own back? Nicely twisted tale there C x

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  9. Ha ha ha ha, clever chap indeed, I wonder what trap he would now set for his brother in retaliation.

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  10. I see a long story of fighting over a dwindling fortune… Jarndyce comes to mind.

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  11. Mandie Hines says:

    Such a great scene and atmosphere set in a short space. The tension was so high and I want more! That pesky word limit is working against me this week.

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  12. Sandra says:

    I wouldn’t like to be around when he comes back downstairs again. Tough times ahead I suspect. Lovely to see you here.

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  13. pennygadd51 says:

    He who laughs last, laughs longest. I suspect the younger brother will out-think his sibling every time.

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  14. James says:

    This is the opposite with my younger brother and me. After Dad died, we were okay with what he left us. In fact, Dad was such a pack rat, we had to get rid of most of his stuff because it was just old junk.

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  15. liz young says:

    Elder brother had emptied the hole already?

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  16. Iain Kelly says:

    Foiled – I sense this is not the final chapter of their particular story. Whose turn is it to set the next trap?

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  17. Moon says:

    Great story.🙂

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  18. Great story about sibling rivalry. Loved how I was crawling in the dark with him.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  19. Dear C.E.

    Twould seem that laughter will be the last thing he ever hears. You took sibling rivalry to higher level. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  20. neilmacdon says:

    No flash of lightning then

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