The Appointment – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
Today’s exquisite photo by Piya Singh transports me to days long gone. Well, to my FF offering of two weeks ago!
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture, below.

Copyright Piya Singh

Copyright Piya Singh

The Appointment

I become increasingly anxious.
I try to concentrate, to remember where I am, why I am here.
Nothing.
Others have come and gone, I am still waiting.
I cannot see how they are called.
They appear to just get up, unbidden, and walk away.
Some nod to their neighbours, smile, but no one acknowledges me.
I squirm on the hard seat.
A tall, severe lady in a white uniform appears, beckons to me.
She leads me to a previously unnoticed door.
I go through, tentatively, nervously.
I see the Highland croft where I spent happy childhood holidays.
I am home.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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69 Responses to The Appointment – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Dee says:

    Really liked this CE especially the confusion and could almost feel the apprehension building. Hope you are fully recovered now.

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  2. Margaret says:

    So this is what he was waiting for two stories ago – or rather what was waiting for him. I hope you can leave him there in peace, CE. I have a disturbing image of the lady in white rushing through that door and whisking him back again – his records got mixed up with someone else’s. Nevertheless, I like how you wove those two scenes together. Very nice.

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  3. athling2001 says:

    Suspenseful tory with a nice tidying ending.

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  4. jellico84 says:

    Oh, liked the twist on the end. Wonderful writing this week! Enjoyed it greatly.

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  5. Amy Reese says:

    Nice to see this end on a happy note. Wonderful, CE. The severe woman had me guessing. I thought he might be in a mental institution. I hope you are feeling better!

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  6. You had me worried for a moment but it ended with a smile.
    Thank you

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  7. mickwynn2013 says:

    I was worried the door would open on to something horrible but this was lovely.Well done

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  8. draliman says:

    As I was reading it dawned on me that this was a guy waiting in limbo. I’m glad he’s finally been called, and to a very pleasant location!

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  9. Seems like he has entered paradise. Lovely.

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  10. It seems he’s finally followed the light. It could possibly be your character from your last story. Lovely that he goes to his childhood home. Well written as always, C.E. I hope your physical problems are lessening. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • ceayr says:

      Yes, Suzanne, this decided at some point to be a sequel, surprised me too.
      Thank you for your kind words.
      And for your kind thoughts, but no quick cure, a year of therapy, or re-education of nerves and muscles, assuming problem gets no worse.

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  11. Abhishek says:

    Loved the appointment… we will all have that one day

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  12. It could be the tax office though. Or the dentist.
    What a lovely place to have been brought up in.

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  13. d3athlily says:

    I loved this. It feels like a spiritual successor to your train story two weeks ago. Well done!

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  14. Something tells me that you’ve been thinking quite a lot about the eventual prospect of your own death.
    Beautifully written story – I really loved the sense of mounting anxiety, the nervousness, the sudden appearance of the “tall, severe lady in a white uniform” (how I love that description of the Guide to the Afterlife!), and then, the Highland croft.
    Simply beautiful

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  15. Wonderfully simple. The last line says it all!

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  16. This story seems like a prompt all in itself, since I can think of a number of things that might be going on here. Great job and something to think about too.
    -David

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  17. mandibelle16 says:

    Very nice. Ending where you’ve begun.

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  18. wmqcolby says:

    How nice to finally make it back to square one of life. Cue the Dvorak music.
    Good stuff, CE.

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  19. Oh yes I still remember you take on the one two weeks ago… after Limbo you might get there… I’m happy for an end that take you back… wonderful story.

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  20. Joe Owens says:

    He is not patient in waiting to see what is coming. But then who really is?

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  21. Lynn Love says:

    What a great build up you gave us there. Such tension in such a short piece, then the release of finding himself home again – just gorgeous. Made me feel quite emotional, that feeling of home. Lovely

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  22. Graham Lawrence says:

    A very visual and intriguing story. Graham liked it too.

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  23. liz young says:

    Life after death? Well written, even if I’ve guessed wrong.

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  24. ansumani says:

    A bit of intrigue and then he’s home. Nicely done.

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  25. I love this, at least he ends up somewhere familiar.

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  26. michael1148humphris says:

    This had me thinking of the poetry of war and on to the wings of angels.

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  27. Sandra says:

    Loved this, especially the build up, the confusion and growing apprehension. And a lovely turn at the end. Excellent!

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  28. neilmacdon says:

    Am I right that this is the same story as the one for the waiting room, but with a different ending? Now that’s parsimonious and cunning. They do say there’s only really one story in the world, don’t they?

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  29. A very well written piece, CE!

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  30. Dear CE,

    This sounds like the appointment we hall have to keep one day. I loved his return to his childhood home in the end. A very Twilight Zone feel to it in a sweet way. Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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