Happy Birthday – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s tale is by way of a small tribute, to celebrate her birthday.
The idea is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below.

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Happy Birthday

I am late.
Today is her birthday.
I have beautiful purple roses, and a reservation at a restaurant I cannot afford.
Plus a ring in my pocket.
My boss, Monsieur Deschamps, is an inflexible, bad-tempered oaf.
Maybe my mind did wander slightly this afternoon, thinking ahead to this evening, but to keep me so long was unpardonable.
I am running through the streets.
I know she will be at the open window, waiting impatiently.
I am surprised when I turn the corner.
She is not there.
But a small crowd has gathered, looking down in silence.
The approaching siren wails.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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114 Responses to Happy Birthday – Friday Fictioneers

  1. And you take a happy story and turn it bad! Nicely done, but it looks like I’m the positive thinker this week.

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  2. adamjasonp says:

    Well, this is one way to honor the hostess’ birthday… 🙂

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    • ceayr says:

      Okay, Adam, it is like this.
      I haven’t eliminated anyone for nearly 2 weeks, and I was getting a bit twitchy, so I just thought to myself:
      If you’re gonna do it, do it big.
      Ah well, she’s had a good run, yeah?

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  3. Dear CE,
    It’s unfotunate he was late … very late, for a very important date. OMG .. I’m quoting the rabbit from Alice in Wonderland; maybe, this is a fiarytale. Well, he bought flowers, made a dinner reservation at a restaurant he couldn’t afford …. sounds like a fairytale to me. 😄
    Seriously, this is a great story. Rochelle makes a wonderful muse.
    Adios,
    Isadora 😎

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  4. Amy Reese says:

    Oh, no! Well, of course, this can’t end happily. Once again, I am surprised by your twist at the end. I wanted her to have those purple roses. Nicely done.

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  5. Well, if I read this right, at least he still has his job and he can return the ring?

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  6. SarCou says:

    I was getting worried there, for a moment – I thought there was going to be a happy ending. I feared for the safety of our universe; the integrity of our space/time continuum. But gladly not. The body count continues 😀 great piece, as always!

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    • ceayr says:

      Really?
      Nah, haven’t bumped anyone off for ages, maybe two weeks, so m’lady Rochelle was a cinch to snuff it.
      Thank you for your kind words, delighted you found it worthwhile.

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  7. gahlearner says:

    Sorry, my comment seemed to have gone to the wrong thread. It shouldn’t have been a reply to Jennifer.

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  8. Why was I not expecting the twist? Well done as usual.

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  9. nimi naren says:

    That was a shock ending. Phew!

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  10. Honie Briggs says:

    I enjoyed the comments as much as the story! Way to a conversation started.

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  11. Dee says:

    The purple roses were a nice touch as was M. Deschamps (schoolgirl French to the rescue). A very different birthday, very well told CE.

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  12. It appears your story was a big hit–in both good and bad ways. Well done!

    janet

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  13. rgayer55 says:

    Here’s what really happened, Rapunzel Fields let down her hair so that Prince Charming could climb the curly stair, but it turned out to be a wig and it fell onto the sidewalk. A crowd gathered, thinking a bear or some other giant beast had succumbed to her charms. An animal rights activist called the police to have her arrested for killing the poor creature, thus explaining the siren.

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  14. Wow. I loved the story but was not too fond of all the comments. They ruined my ending, the ending I imagined. Her brains were splattered across the road? I’m glad you left that out of your initial story. But you are quite talented. I may have to read more of your work.

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    • ceayr says:

      Hi Emilio, and welcome.
      Please ignore the comments, they are not part of the story.
      The story is 100 words, finished.
      What I say in the comments are just off the cuff remarks to amuse, wind up or, in some cases, irritate the commenter.
      I am glad you enjoyed the story and hope you will read more.
      If you go to my Current Story page, you can hear me read a very short tale from my book, released a few weeks ago.
      Thank you for visiting, and for taking the time to share your thoughts.

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  15. Oh nooo! Such a sad ending.

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  16. I think the jealous other suitor Deschamps got there first and realising he was about to lose his prize decided no one else should get it. Hope your girl was saved, for Rochelle’s sake 🙂 Loved how you led us up the slope and dropped us off the cliff.

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  17. I found it very sad. I hope that Yolanda is right that she is helping someone who had a heart attack although I know the answer to that is no. He was late one time too many.

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  18. A lovely tale, I say he arrives to find her helping the poor man who’d had a heart attack. Happy ending for me!

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  19. I’m left speechless by your cleverness.

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  20. jwdwrites says:

    Poor guy, he’s never gonna get his dinner now! 🙂

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  21. paulmclem says:

    Ending certainly caught me out. Think I’d have preferred a happy ending. Who knows, maybe it will be yet.

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  22. Uh oh!! Nice cliffhanger! 🙂
    Great job!!

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  23. Graham Lawrence says:

    Oh no! (and such a lovely choice of name!)

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  24. Tough times. The gentle body belies the tragid ending.

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  25. Tough story. The romantic first three quarters belie the tragic end.

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  26. emmylgant says:

    Time and unforeseen circumstances befall us all…
    tragic but well done. As usual the ending surprises but that’s totally pardonable.

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    • ceayr says:

      Without the ending, dear Emmy, it is just me having a bad day!
      As we say in France, c’est la merde.

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      • emmylgant says:

        I did not express correctly what I meant. Sorry. The endings are, of course, the story. You misdirect brilliantly and it is this misleading that is ‘pardonable’ because the reader is delighted/struck by the last line. and it is always worth it.

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        • ceayr says:

          Merci, Emmy, but if you read the other comments, ‘delighted’ is not much in evidence.
          Struck, perhaps, shocked, annoyed and disbelieving, certainly.
          But hey, you know what Shakespeare says.

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  27. Dale says:

    So… to celebrate Rochelle’s birthday, you kill her off? Do remind me not to get on your bad side, Mr. Ayr! 😉
    As usual, very well done!

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  28. The tragedy of young, impatient love…That’s why my parents had bars on our windows. Even though we lived on the ground floor. 🙂 You managed to perfectly blend love, frustration and tragedy.

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  29. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear C.E.

    A story with impact. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  30. Niki says:

    If she jumps out of a window just because you’re a bit late imagine the fuss if you forgot your anniversary – lucky escape if you ask me!

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  31. micklively says:

    I’m all in favour of punctuality but suicide seems a step too far.
    Good piece.

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  32. Sandra says:

    Very touching CE. I liked the ‘purple roses’ touch. Fitting!

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  33. Belinda Crane says:

    Oh dear! Did she jump, fall or was she pushed?! Great story! 🙂

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  34. Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
    AnElephantCant be trunk-tied
    He always knows just what to say
    Today it is simple
    He thinks of her dimple
    He sends Rochelle a big hug and a mammoth Happy Birthday

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  35. Dear C.E.

    Such a tragic way to celebrate her birthday. My heart dropped out the window. Well done but so sad.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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