Cars – Friday Fictioneers

I have some news to share here
which I’ll explain anon
but before that let me tell you
AnElephant is gone

so now I must inform you
I suffer from an affliction
I’m a compulsive writer
of what I call Sound Bite Fiction

Friday Fictioneers is a weekly challenge hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, to whom I owe a huge debt of gratitude.
The idea is to write a story of around 100 words inspired by the picture below.

© Jean L. Hays

© Jean L. Hays

Cars

It is almost dark when they appear.
I am walking along the old moor road, far from home.
I know from the roar of their engines that they are the Killie Boys.
Our sworn enemies.
I start to run.
I know that they have already seen me from the high point.
I turn down a dirt track, my feet flying, my breath gasping.
I know, as they do, that there is nowhere to hide out here in this barren country.
But I do not want to hide.
I just want to lead them into the traps we dug earlier.

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About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered peace in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte Vermeille, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random. So, nobody’s perfect.
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39 Responses to Cars – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Funny story CE. Looking at the photo I would say that the traps worked. 😉

  2. uehobbyist's avatar uehobbyist says:

    Nice Ending 🙂

  3. gahlearner's avatar gahlearner says:

    I’m shedding crocodile tears for the elphant. I didn’t know him well, but liked what I read. But no matter who you are or he is, I’ll read on. This story has a great build-up, very scary. These kids fight hard (even if the result is chuckle-worthy).

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      No tears, please, for AnElephant.
      He has had a good run, and will still do the funnies over at his zoo.
      Big thanks for your kind words and support.

  4. The trap is set, the bait launched, and by the photo I’d say the villains captured. Well done!

  5. Vinay Leo R.'s avatar Vinay Leo R. says:

    AnElephantCant will me missed
    Interesting, his comments were
    But his fiction has passed on
    To this upstart Sir C. E. Ayr :mrgreen:

    Good that the trap worked. Are the Killie Boys still inside, I wonder 🙂

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      a rhyme a rhyme
      from cool Vinay
      thanks for your time
      c. e. must say

      as for the Killie Boys
      it is hard to care
      one of life’s little joys
      says Sir C. E. Ayr

  6. Great story. Those Killie boys got theirs!

  7. ansumani's avatar ansumani says:

    Nice plot.
    No offense… but I like the pink elephant better…No, Freudian analysis please 🙂

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      Glad you liked story.
      No offence taken.
      As Shakespeare says, one man’s pachyderm is another man’s poison.

  8. Sandra's avatar Sandra says:

    Ah! schizophrenia rules OK. Great story, great tactics.

  9. Dale's avatar Dale says:

    Hmmm… now I’m confused…
    Love your take on the prompt!

  10. Oh finally the secret behind the pink elephant is exposed… I need a glass of beer 🙂

    Interesting take, laying traps.. sounds like something out of Mad Max..

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      Nothing is exposed, Bjorn, just another layer of deceit!
      But great to see you here, and glad you found something to ponder in my story.

  11. ceayr, so nice to meet you. A nifty story.

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      We have met previously, Samantha, when I wore a different (pinker) disguise!
      Glad you enjoyed the story.
      And nifty!
      So long since I heard that word.
      Ya dancer!

  12. Hello Ceayr! A fantastic take on the prompt, beautifully written as always and I love your poetry. 🙂

  13. emmylgant's avatar emmylgant says:

    Run, ceayr! Run!
    Well set up trap for the reader as well.
    images of North by Northwest in the description of the chase..
    Then I couldn’t help but wonder
    Did you stuff AnElephant in a trunk?

  14. micklively's avatar micklively says:

    Parvenu and pachyderm molester: I like your take on the photo.

  15. Dear C.E.

    Gangs are universal, aren’t they? Sad but well written piece.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    PS You’re much nicer looking than a pink elephant.

    • ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

      At this moment, dear lady, I am almost the same colour!
      Thank you for your kind words, and for the inspiration behind the book.

  16. Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
    AnElephantCant believe it
    He is tearing out his hair
    He is steadily being ousted
    By the upstart C.E. Ayr

  17. niasunset's avatar niasunset says:

    Nice story poem 🙂 But I should say, I am sad to hear that An Elephant has gone… I have never met before an elephant who writes poetical stories… I am sure he is in somewhere else and waiting for being missed… Thank you Ceeayr, have a nice day, love, nia

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