Accentuate the Essential – Friday Fictioneer

AnElephantCant deny it
He’s a devoted Friday Fictioneer
His first try was quite fun
So for his second one
He thinks to the rules he’ll adhere

Last week he exceeded his word count
He apologises for his blunder
So this week he’s aware
He takes much better care
And his total is exactly one hundred

The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on a picture prompt (below).
That’s it.
The last few people shuffle past, or stop before her, hoisting their baggage into the overheads.
The seat beside her lies empty.
She wonders if it will still be empty when they depart.
Everyone has settled.
A man appears, ambling, insouciant.
He grins and says something to the uniformed lady who approaches him sternly.
Her rebuke becomes a pink-cheeked giggle.

He stops where she sits and somehow squeezes his bag into a space above his head.
Her irritation increases.

Hi, he says.
Her anger melts away instantly.
She is enchanted by his voice and his accent.
‘I got your book’.

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51 Responses to Accentuate the Essential – Friday Fictioneer

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  2. R. E. Hunter says:

    Nice one. I love your intro poem too.


  3. Thank you, yes I’ve seen celebrities travelling like ordinary people. 🙂


  4. Lady Lovely says:

    Loved it! Another great share 🙂 Hip hip hooray!


  5. Tom Poet says:

    Let me just say I am happy that have been invited to say something rude.. I have nothing rude to say this time but I will tell you the truth… Women love a man with an attitude, add an accent and a smooth voice and they are damn near helpless. I enjoyed this story because this is how life really is…you made your characters real. I love that.


    • I find that I can only write life as it really is. If you read AnElephant’s more whimsical offerings you may wonder at this but, for some of us, every day is an adventure. Thank you for your very kind words.


  6. emmylgant says:

    This is a great little open ended story that directly solicits the input of the reader in the fine tradition of such writers as Robbe-Grillet, M. Duras, and to some extent Amelie Nothomb. The reader is given just enough info on the characters to flesh them out on his own and to invent/ fill out/ explore possibilities. After all what is the purpose of any story if not to take us somewhere we have not been before AND to use our imagination to fill in the blanks? Good job. AnElephantCan!


    • AnElephant is sadly out of his depth with Emmy’s comparisons to the French exponents of the ‘New Novel’.
      He requires further education in this field, but is nevertheless flattered by her words and grateful for the comments.
      And happy that you enjoyed his little tale.


      • emmylgant says:

        I thought I would inject a little pedantic comment of my own, just for the h*** of it. … Wouldn’t it be fun to have your tale be a prompt for what comes next? Then we might even have a tale within a tale, and we’d all be chasing our tails….


  7. rich says:

    in this line “The seat beside her lies empty.” i think it should be “lay” empty. also, at the end, i’m not sure who said “i got your book.” did she say it to him or him to her?


  8. denmother says:

    Very cool! Want to know more!


  9. I hope to hear those same words one day soon. “I got your book”. Great job. Wonder where it goes from here?


  10. “I got your book.” Now there’s a new pick up line. Wonder where this will go. Cute stuff.


  11. Really enjoyed…I like the way images formed in my mind while reading…and the end that made me wondering… 🙂


  12. yerpirate says:

    This is so fun and so easy to read! Wonderful..and so good aloud!


  13. billgncs says:

    he may appear insouciant
    perhaps to her we was heaven sent?


  14. Joe Owens says:

    RUDE! Sorry, had to do it! I like this. She wants, then she doesn’t then finally she gets more than she imagined.


  15. Willow says:

    Love it! Was immediately drawn in and wanted it to continue.


  16. Attractions come in many different forms. This was a nice change from the ordinary.


  17. elappleby says:

    I enjoyed this – especially the interaction between ambling guy and the stewardness. I want to know who this guy is, though!


  18. nightlake says:

    the voice and accent are his blessings..a good one


  19. dmmacilroy says:

    Your ambling man has a gift. I am left wondering who he is and what it is…and, of course, what the book was about.




  20. I like the word “insouciant” also. Cute story1


  21. I love “ambling, insouciant” because I like those words. You have me wondering how the book fits in. Is she an author and he recognized her from the photo? Or does she know him and he was supposed to bring her book?



  22. boomiebol says:

    Very nice, i smiled after reading this…accents and smooth sweet voices are enchanting…i think 🙂


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