The Stallion – Carrot Ranch

Artwork by Phil Burns

The Carrot Ranch Challenge:
In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story inspired by “Big Black Horse”.

Click here to hear the author read his words:

The Stallion

I hate when he calls me ‘the black horse’.
I’m a thoroughbred stallion, a champion.
He is an insensitive brute.
I wonder what she ever saw in him.
She is gentle, caring, loving.
I worship her.
This morning I didn’t run well.
Maybe a touch of hay fever?
He’s not amused, he shouts at me.
But when he raises his whip, she tries to stop him.
And he strikes her.
She retaliates by whacking him over the head with one of those tools.
I think he’s going to get up and hurt her.
So I make sure he doesn’t.

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12 Responses to The Stallion – Carrot Ranch

  1. Norah says:

    That’s an interesting POV. We got to know all three characters


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  3. Charli Mills says:

    Who needs a knight in shining armor when you have a big black horse for protection? Great use of placing the point of view on the horse.


  4. Liz H says:

    Never doubt the love of a night stallion for a true and kindly heart.
    Don’t ever risk it.


  5. jenne49 says:

    I like that stallion! 😉
    Love and loyalty rewarded in a story where the brute isn’t the animal.
    ‘Maybe a touch of hay fever?’ – wonderful line.
    And a story around a horse that says so much about the relationship between the humans.


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