Flowers – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, the standard, and the prompt photo.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on the picture below, which this week is supplied by J Hardy
Carroll.

© J Hardy Carroll

Click here to hear the author read his words:

Flowers

Love at first sight?
I don’t know about that, but I was certainly smitten.
She is kind, intelligent, and beautiful.
And when she moves all of her seems to move in all the right ways.
I think she might be that special lady I’ve always dreamed about.
So I’ve been wooing her in the old-fashioned way.
It is obvious that she approves of this, we are getting along very well.
Until I give her the flowers.
It seems I might have misunderstood her when she told me that she reacts rather violently to hay-fever.
Please, sweetheart, put down the gun.

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58 Responses to Flowers – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Seems a little extreme and yet, I can relate. 😉

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  2. I think she can claim self-defense… you started it by bringing a lethal weapon.

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  3. Very entertaining. I’m wondering was she holding a suspiciously large handbag, big enough to hold a gun ?

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  4. James McEwan says:

    Crikes! I liked the sudden twist, perhaps it’s the histamine that sets her off rather than the pollen.

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  5. 4963andypop says:

    Great play on the medical and everyday meanings of the word “reaction.” Lets hope this is not common. 😊

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  6. MythRider says:

    Me thinks you should have been listening better, been considering her feels more.
    But hey, maybe she likes ghosts. If so, you might still have a chance.

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  7. Lynn Love says:

    Ha! Not what your narrator – or I – expected. Lovely build up and a cracking ending, though I wonder what happens next. What if she sneezes and accidentally blows his head off? As so often happens, C, your fiction prompted a smile in the most devilish way

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  8. draliman says:

    Ha, not the “violent reaction” he expected. Hopefully she’s a rubbish shot and they can talk it out…

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  9. kristianw84 says:

    Hahaha!!! I did not see that twist coming! Great job!!

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  10. Liz Young says:

    It might be a good idea to move on – quickly!

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  11. bearmkwa says:

    Mom, Gram, and Grands all had severe asthma/emphasema so plants were never allowed in house. Now that I have my own house, I’ve started to venture to having a few. It’s different, and pleasant this winter to have flowers.

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  12. Sandra says:

    She should consider herself very lucky. My husband would rather die than ever, (and I mean ever) give me flowers. And so…

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  13. …and whoever said love is for the chicken hearted! Loved the last line Ceayr.

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  14. Russell says:

    That’s some serious hayfever! Well done!

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  15. LOVE hearing you read your stories and this tale tickled me! Love that last line. Great job, and thanks.
    Ronda

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  16. Mike says:

    Artificial flowers sound safer, but doe he have enough time left.

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  17. Nobbinmaug says:

    Well, you did bring her severed limbs of living things. That could be construed as a threat similar to the horse head in the bed of Godfather fame.

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  18. granonine says:

    Oh, what a surprise! Well done, CE– made me smile, in spite of the threat of violence.

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  19. That last line’s a killer! Nice one CE.

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  20. Iain Kelly says:

    I react in a similar way to flowers in the house – sneezing that is, not the gun. Instead I wait until it is politely possible to get rid of the flowers!

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  21. Tannille says:

    A little bit of crazy just adds spice 😀.

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  22. pennygadd51 says:

    You made me laugh with this story, CE. Hlarious!
    I liked the build-up to the twist, especially “And when she moves all of her seems to move in all the right ways” which captures exactly the sort of irrational feelings of powerful sexual attraction.

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  23. Dear CE,

    I guess that could be called an explosive sneeze.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  24. ellenbest24 says:

    An epi pen is going to be of no help to this reaction … unless you thrust it in her jugular. A good twist all enhanced by your voice. Well played.

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  25. neilmacdon says:

    A violent reaction indeed

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