The Oath – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s
image comes courtesy of Jean L. Hays. I find it somewhat bleak, so I have written something cheerful.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Jean L. Hays

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

The Oath

I know he is coming.
Coming to kill me.
I can’t run.
He will follow.
He has to, he has no choice.
We both know he is no match for me.
I am stronger and faster, mentally and physically.
But I can’t kill him.
I swore I’d never kill again.
I made that oath to her on her death bed.
And that oath means more to me than my life.
Without her, my life means nothing.
He is almost here.
I step outside and gaze across the wastelands.
Far away, I see death approaching.
I sit down, and wait.

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65 Responses to The Oath – Friday Fictioneers

  1. What a quandary!
    If he breaks his promise he might be able to live but will he be able to live with himself , if he breaks his promise.


  2. James McEwan says:

    The acceptance, regret and finality renders deep sadness.


  3. pennygadd51 says:

    Great story, CE! You really convey the desperation of the central character, and the inevitability of his fate.


  4. subroto says:

    It’s a waiting game, maybe he is coming to ask for forgiveness 😉


  5. Kalpana Solsi says:

    There are some things worse than death.


  6. this is another one in which your reading of it enhances it superbly. Just evocative and excellent!


  7. Abhijit Ray says:

    Good you are standing by your words. You don’t have to kill him, but you can take him prisoner. Don’t have to be a sitting duck, if he is no match to you.


  8. I think this is one of your best, C.E. I’ve listened twice now. Kudos.


  9. Violet Lentz says:

    There are times when it seems death is the easiest option. Nicely told, CE.


  10. Good story and writing, C.E. Maybe he could defeat Death like the characters, Bill and Ted when they came back to life by winning at the game “Battleship” in “Bogus Journey”. My son used to love to mimic Death saying, “You sunk my Battleship”. 🙂 — Suzanne


  11. Great spoken word. It’s a Greek tragedy.


  12. draliman says:

    I’m not sure I would have his strength. This would make a good end to a film, one of those dark and atmospheric ones 🙂


  13. You make the funny macabre and the macabre funny. Verywell written Ceayr.


  14. Brilliant! I wondered where we were going. Now, that’s true love.

    Liked by 1 person

  15. Tessa says:

    Wow, just when I get used to you killing off someone you sit and wait for death itself. So different.


  16. Oh yes, thats a really dark tale, love that one!!


  17. 4963andypop says:

    I guess its “Opposite Day”. 😊 i like the uncertainty of whether the one coming for him is human, or Death himself.


  18. Powerful and devastating and inspiring and … frustrating … and … Well done!


  19. Not so much fun… but maybe with her dead, life doesn’t matter anyway.


  20. …and you said my story was dark! Thanks for letting my character know where you are!


  21. granonine says:

    The mood is tangible. The MC is resigned, actually seems to look forward to his death. Excellent.


  22. Colline says:

    Powerfully written! I like it.


  23. Sandra says:

    I think your character may see it slightly differently in a short while. A bleak story indeed.


  24. Varad says:

    There’s a bit of poignancy in the way he accepts his fate. Living without a reason is worse than death.


  25. Danny James says:

    I have a feeling he won’t have to wait long.



  26. Iain Kelly says:

    I wonder if at the last second, just as Death’s hand is at his throat, he might not reconsider how much that oath really means to him…

    Liked by 1 person

  27. Tannille says:

    This is great. The protagonist’s anticipation really shone through.


  28. Dear CE,

    Yep that was a cheerful story indeed. Think I’ll go listen to funeral dirges for levity now.



    Liked by 3 people

  29. neilmacdon says:

    Wonderful atmosphere

    Liked by 1 person

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