Snow Fall – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
T
his week’s chilly image comes once again courtesy of Roger Bultot.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.

© Roger Bultot

Click here to hear the writer read his words:

Snow Fall

Sunday morning.
The sun clambers into view, casting long shadows.
The snow starts to melt.
As it has done for the past three days, before freezing again overnight.
Soon there is slush over ice, a dangerous combination.
The old folk on their way to worship totter carefully, leaning on canes and each other.
They are a cheerful old crowd, quite lovable in their way.
They say you can judge a society by how it cares for its elderly.
So why don’t the authorities grit the pavements?
Then my subtle nudges wouldn’t cause uncertain feet to slip, and hips to break.

About ceayr

A Scot who has discovered Paradise in a small town he calls Medville on the Côte d'Azur, C.E. Ayr has spent a large part of his life in the West of Scotland and a large part elsewhere. His first job was selling programmes at his local football club and he has since tried 73 other career paths, the longest being in IT, with varying degrees of success. He is somewhat nomadic, fairly irresponsible and, according to his darling daughter, a bit random.
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72 Responses to Snow Fall – Friday Fictioneers

  1. subroto says:

    He needs a spring loaded blade in his walking stick. For his own enjoyment of course.

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  2. Oh my…evil evil being!

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  3. lisarey1990 says:

    I love your writing because I can never tell how the stories are going to end. Wish I had that gift. Great write!

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  4. rogershipp says:

    Well done! Loved teh description! Enjoyed. Love it when authors read thier own works!

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  5. Oh, the curse of a broken hip. Nice twist as usual.

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  6. Subtle indeed!
    I mean, your writing!💐

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  7. Ouch!

    You never fail us.

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  8. Well-written, C.E. I was wondering when that evil streak was going to show up. The ending is a good place. —- Suzanne

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  9. Gouy corine says:

    Au début je me suis dit ( tiens peut-être un conte de NOËL puis à la fin j’étais avec le Grinch)
    J’ADORE ! 😂

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  10. Tessa says:

    I simply can’t wait until FF each week to hear your newest recording. I don’t even look ahead as I like listening to you read it and I know it is going to have a nasty ending no matter how nice it starts off.

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  11. I know longer put down my guard, until that last sentence, but oh how you weave a sense of comfort–– and then shove us over! Again, each time I think that it would be fun to sit down with a cup of coffee, or a good red, and talk about writing, I realize you might slip some arsenic in there… just to watch me froth at the mouth! 😉 Always good writing, C.E., whatever the blows.

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  12. Well that last line was quite a twist! A lovely piece of writing with a dark turn at the end… well done.

    -Rachel

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  13. Abhijit says:

    So many layers in the story. Cheerful seniors. Careless authorities. A cruel assailant who deliberately pushes elderly to injure them. Many emotions.

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  14. draliman says:

    Oh boy, it was so nice up until the last line! I like how he’s managing to blame the council…

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  15. gahlearner says:

    At least he didn’t murder them this week. That last sentence adds the spice to the story.

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  16. If it wasn’t for the snow you would have to go too less subtle method you evil man… does the hospital pay you for giving them business?

    Like

  17. tedstrutz says:

    Oh boy, not sure what to think on this one, CE, you never disappoint. Fun hearing you read your story.

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  18. Great twist, I wasn’t expecting that. Like Rochelle, hope karma gets him in the end. =)

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  19. That’s pretty creepy. Apparently society needs to do more than just grit the pavement to guard against him. 🙂

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  20. Jade Li says:

    The machinations and rationalizations of a sociopath!

    Like

  21. granonine says:

    Well, you certainly built up to your final sentence perfectly and with great skill. I saw you as a sympathetic character right up to the broken hips 🙂

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  22. Sandra says:

    I was waiting for the other shoe to drop. And drop it did! They say ‘write about what you know’. Sometimes I wonder about you. 🙂

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  23. Dear CE,

    What a sly fellow. Perhaps Karma will cause him to lose his own footing on the ice. We can only hope.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  24. Ah, so you are to blame for me slipping over in my story!

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  25. Iain Kelly says:

    Now that’s just mean. It’s one thing to watch them all slipping and falling for amusement, quite another to instigate the falling! 🙂

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  26. Tannille says:

    You painted a picture with words. Captured a real wintery feel.

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  27. Frewie says:

    Ah there is a wee devil in there, love it x

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  28. Yes, i too thought this is turning mushy. And then the evil popped out. Lovely misdirection. Great story, Ceayr.

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  29. neilmacdon says:

    As I read, this seemed almost sentimental. But then, I thought “no, not CE”. And I was right. Nice twist

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