Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
This week’s chilly image comes courtesy of Dale Rogerson.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.
Click here to hear the writer read his words:
Going Out
Me: Where’s my good jacket?
Her: Are you going out again?
Yes it’s, um, business.
Of course it is.
Where’s my new shirt?
You are dressing up for an evening business meeting?
Well I, er, need to look smart.
Of course you do.
Where are my boots of Spanish leather?
Same place as the rest of your things.
That isn’t very helpful, is it?
I put them all out for you.
Oh, thanks!
I thought you deserved that.
So…
Come over to the window.
The window?
Do you see that big black bag lying in the snow?
Uh…
Goodbye, sweetie.
Just as it should be done! I do so love boots of Spanish leather, but it all depends on who’s wearing them!
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What a lad. He will have to hurry. I hear that a tramp has his boots.🙂
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Love how you’ve constructed this, C. The hints at his duplicity, the slow revelation that she is onto his game and won’t stand for it any longer. She definitely taught that one a lesson! Well written C
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Girls got smarts!
Fun read.
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A touch of frost in the lady’s behaviour but then revenge is a dish best served cold.
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Love it, thank you!
Cheers,
Ronda
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Very funny. I like her style.
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Hehe, that made me snort. That nerve of his, expecting her to have all his stuff ready, ‘where is this, where is that’ for his ‘business’ meeting. He doesn’t deserve a smart woman like her.
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The last line made me chuckle.
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She threw his things! Now he has to get the bag to look smart 🙂
Out Of Sight & Out Of This World – Anita
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Class! Really well done, he deserved that one, so brazen, what an idiot!
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I liked the causal approach and the finality of the situation.
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if he didn’t get the hint, he must be too dense. 🙂
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Heh heh, made me smile! Poor chap. Or maybe he has somewhere else to hang his hat (if he can find it)…
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Congrats on being first to post this week! 🙂 Great little write, too!
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Laughing.
Thank you, I wasn’t even very early!
Glad you enjoyed.
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She threw you out. May be good looking Tony has something to do with it. But you are not blameless either! Who wears a pair of perfectly good shoe on a snowed out evening?
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Dang, I haven’t seen him around, you might be right!
And they are boots of Spanish leather, sir, a chap has to look good regardless of the weather
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Très drôle , J’ADORE ! 😂
Cela me rappelle une histoire , je te la raconterai.
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J’suis un funny guy.
Merci, madame
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She sounds like she has been through this before, these evening business meetings. My money was on her pushing him out the window!
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Sorry to disappoint, but she is, after all, a lady!
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Loved it!
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Then I am happy!
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Very well told!
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Very well commented!
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Some hobo is going to be very well-dressed in the near future.
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Ha ha – I liked the way you used the bag as your focus for the story.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Well, it is kinda sitting there in the middle foreground!
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Great dialogue! I love how helpful she was, so much so she helped him out the door. Yay! =)
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Thanks, Brenda, your ‘yay!’ made me laugh!
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He got his just deserts. Was she wearing a leopard skinned pill box hat to go with his boots of Spanish Leather?
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No, but you have to admit she behaved just like a woman
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Great take. At least he wasn’t in the bag with his shoes.
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Laughing.
Thank you
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A good story, C.E. I loved the ending. At least he wasn’t put out in that bag. 😀 — Suzanne
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Glad you enjoyed, Suzanne.
And yes, a few of my characters have ended up like that!
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That’s cold. 🙂
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Like the weather, hmm?
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NO, that’s a figure of speech here when something seems rather heartless.
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Out in the cold, for sure. I love the way you built up to that wonderful coup de gras.
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Thanks, Linda, happy that it worked for you
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lol, yep, it sounds like he deserved for her to put his things out….
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Yeah, well, these little misunderstandings…
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hmmm, “misunderstandings”… a good term for it…
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Hah! Good one! I laugh at the ending!
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Thank you, I smile at your comment
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Enjoyed the subtle banter!
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Thank you, Tannille
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Dear CE,
I like her style. It sounds like he had it coming. Nothing like a big black bag for taking out the garbage. Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, m’lady.
And he seemed so personable…
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Making her point without subtlety, probably what was needed. Nice use of the detail and gave me a chuckle.
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Glad you enjoyed, Iain
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You are a funny guy!
I agree, great use of the black garbage bag.
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Thanks, Em, but eveeerrrybody knows that!
At today’s prices I couldn’t let it go to waste.
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Oops! Shouldn’t have tried his luck when its snowing outside. As Neil said, great use of the bag. Well done, CE.
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A man’s gotta do…
And, it seems, so does a lady!
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Great use of the black bag
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Thanks, Neil
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