Friday Fictioneers is hosted by the wonderful Rochelle, the undisputed master of what I call Sound Bite Fiction.
She sets the weekly challenge, and the standard.
And this week she uses her own photo to inspire our creativity.
My story can be read as a sequel to last week’s or, if your memory is as flaky as mine, just as is.
The idea, as always, is to write a story of around 100 words based on this picture, below.
© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Click here to hear the writer read his words:
Forgiveness
The blinds are open.
The flowers that I sent are on the window-sill.
She stands beside them, waves up to me.
It seems she understands my adoration, and forgives my earlier dubious behaviour.
I raise my binoculars, focus on her.
With a radiant smile she throws her arms wide and starts to dance.
I am enchanted as her short dress swirls around her thighs.
At first I ignore the doorbell, but it is persistent.
I hurry to answer, unwilling to miss a second of her performance.
He is huge.
And quite violent.
My binoculars were never designed to fit there.
Sound Bite Fiction 
Love that last line!
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Love that last comment!
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Ah, the stalked gets her revenge! And what a painful revenge it is! Love her captivating dance, her distracting him as his fate comes to the door. And a devilish last line, C. Brilliant
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Happy bunny here, Lynn, praise from you is always special.
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Always a pleasure, C 🙂
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Ha… I imagine it will be hard to sit down after this.
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True, Bjorn, and dancing won’t be much fun either!
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That’s a hilarious – and eyewatering – last line!
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Glad you could relate to it, sir!
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Well not literally, I don’t own any binoculars…
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Last week’s story made me chuckle, this week’s makes me laugh out loud. Wonderful.
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Hey, I’m getting better.
At long last!
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Oh oh … The image you’ve left us with is … well … not designed to fit inside my mind … 😉
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Laughing.
Thank you, I love ‘oh oh…’
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Never screw around when there’s a BIG boyfriend/husband around. Nope.
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Bit late with that advice, Stu!
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I really enjoyed reading. It’s humorous and chilling at the same time. I loved the final twist. He won’t be using them again in a hurry!
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Thank you, Luccia, I love a comment that tells me a story gave enjoyment.
Big smiles here now.
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I wonder how he’s going to explain the binoculars at the Emergency Department. Mind you, they’ve no doubt seen it all.
I’ve occasionally wondered about the people who could be watching us but we have no idea and carry on our business totally oblivious. I know quite a few people who have connected with exboy or girlfriends from years ago although they’re quite happily married, but I could see one of them could easily evolve into a stalker and you might have no idea whatsoever.
Creepy!
Beautifully written and rather clever with a touch of humour in a macabre sort of way.
Best wishes,
Rowena
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You got a bit deep for me there, Rowena, I was just going for a laugh.
C’mon, you’re an Aussie, black humour is your birthright!
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Unfortunately, I’d seen a documentary about Sydney’s St Vincent’s Hospital’s Emergency Department. It’s right in the red light district and they spoke about things shoved where the sun don’t shine.
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A peeping Tom, I think, and her partner coming to shove them where the sun don’t shine, its like Rear Window all over!
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I don’t remember the binoculars being secreted thus in Rear Window, sir
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No!! Of course not, but maybe there were some outtakes!
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Laughing. I think that was before outtakes were invented!
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The humour is brilliant, the result quite painful.
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Sometimes you just gotta laugh, James
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Very tight ending CE…
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I think this is a comment I need to just smirk at, and walk quietly away, Violet.
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Hilarious! It puts a whole new twist on the old line, “Up your nose with a rubber hose.”
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Our equivalent was ‘Up your not-nose with a big bass drum’.
No nasal cavities were threatened in the execution of this story.
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Thank goodness it wasn’t a telescope!
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Hmm, interesting that you think long is worse than broad, Keith, not sure what to make of that!
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Haha, creepy changes to hilarity! Well, not for him 🙂
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Indeed not, sir!
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End of love-story… Hope he survives 🙂
Smart one.
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Oh we’ll see, my narrator is resilient!
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She sent her husband / boyfriend to get you. Yes binoculars are not meant for that place.
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A design flaw, perhaps?
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Ouch! Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha
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Aptly put, sir!
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Oh my….too funny!
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Oh my…thank you!
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Great follow-up piece. Super last line!
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Thank you twice!
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Brilliant last line.:)
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Thank you
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What a fitting ending to a character we love to hate.
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Hmm, not sure ‘fitting’ is the right word!
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Haha
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The story took a much different turn than I imagined it would! Love it, and like so many others, still laughing.
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A change from my usual murder and mayhem, Brenda
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The last line made me laugh out loud. Great story!
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A moment’s inspiration!
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Hard luck. A great funny twist though I was fooled in the beginning. Lovely writing skill.
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Glad you enjoyed, Indira
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Plutôt la suite ! J’adore,
Je suis comme dans une comédie italienne.
Très drôle ❤
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Des fois la vie est une comédie italienne, et des fois un film de Tarantino
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Laughing at the mental picture you created for me 🙂 Good one!
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I have my moments!
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Wonderful sequel… enjoyed it! 🙂
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Thanks, Jelli, happy you did
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Haha, a swift and painful retribution!
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Most uncomfortable!
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Hahahaha!!! XD
This was really funny! 😀
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Thank you, sir
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Teehee! The sun don’t shine there, that’s for sure!
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Ahem. Yes.
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Dear CE,
Oh that last line made me laugh out loud. Subtle but effective.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Then my day was worthwhile, m’lady
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Enjoyed the poetic quality!
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Thank you, Tannille
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Yes, that line had been in splits. Good writing Ceayr.
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Happy to amuse, Neel
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Another lap-top redecoration moment there… and I’ve only recently cleaned it. Bravo!
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Laughing, even your comments have class!
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Still laughing!
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The best medicine!
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Lovely last line
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And lovely comment
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