Sunday Photo Fiction is a weekly challenge presented by my old friend Al Forbes.
The idea is to write a short story (200 word max) inspired by what you see in his picture (below).
This week’s hi-tech vision is a work of art.
As is Al’s superb description which, of course, I totally ignore.
Click on this link to enter your tale, and see what others have written.
Copyright Al Forbes
Elegance
I see her coming towards me, smile wide, arms wider.
Man, she walks beautifully.
We embrace, briefly, exchange a modest kiss.
I open the passenger door of the 911 Carrera Cabriolet, watch her slide in.
I do this partly because I am a gentleman, partly because she moves with such elegance, such class.
I clamber over the driver’s door, pretending to be cool and macho.
She laughs, slaps my arm.
We drive down the scenic coast road, towards her favourite restaurant.
I drink her in, perhaps for a split second too long.
The oncoming car drifts on the bend, I am too slow to react.
When my head clears, she looks less elegant.
Her head cannot be at that angle.
I start to scream…
Beep, beep, beep.
The machine feeds me more drugs.
I see her coming towards me, smile wide…
Sound Bite Fiction 
Very sad ending to this beautiful story. Liked the last line. Amazing how well you all write.
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Very powerful! I see it as a car accident. He’s in the hospital getting drugs and she has died. Wonderful story!
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Indeed, Joy, you have it exactly right.
Very glad you enjoyed.
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Thank you CEAyr! It was a wonderful story!!
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Awful ending to such a promising story. I can see how the image of her broken neck would replay in his nightmares. Not a nice thing to see at all, especially since he cared for her. Thank goodness for the drugs. Great story!
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Thank you, Mandibelle.
I do appreciate that you always take time to visit, read, enjoy and comment.
Your summation is spot on.
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Thanks so much. I enjoy your stories.
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Noooooooooooooo! I was there with them, like watching a movie, enjoying the lovely exchange between them. Poor guy having to relive that moment over and over… Well done, Sir! xo
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Yeeeeesssss!
I am very happy that you related so closely to the words, my dear Dale.
And that they had such an impact.
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Most definitely.
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Reblogged this on anelephantcant and commented:
AnElephantCant use delicate doodahs
To let him near this is a catastrophic mistake
It is bound to break
Causing all sorts of heartache
AnElephant on his best behaviour still has the impact of a major earthquake
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I agree with everybody else about the loop being absolutely amazing 🙂
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How very kind of you, Angie, glad it worked so well.
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Ouch. Nicely done.
Ally
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Thank you, Ally.
Sorry about the ouch!
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pure elegance, love it!
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I bow with swept hat, ma’am!
Thank you.
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A very enjoyable read! I love how you described his “trip” and brought him back to reality.
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You are once again very kind, JC.
I am happy you enjoyed this so much.
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I love stories that go in circles like this … fascinating and not a little scary, but wow, really great!
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I love comments that are so enthusiastic!
Thank you, Georgia.
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Very welcome … fun being able to be enthusiastic 🙂
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She walks like a dream and he wakes up to a nightmare. .. well done.
For me the details build the story: the way he pretends, the way she slaps his arm…. and off I go, taken on a longer/other tale.
I love the way you do that.
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The devil is in the detail, they say, so the story hits harder if you feel for the characters.
Merci, Em, toujours les mots gentils.
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Fantastic! I love the way you did that. I love your unseen twists.
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Thanks, Al, and what an intriguing little gizmo your present is.
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It’s awesome. I’ve been after them since I saw them in a shop a couple of years ago. I nearly brought myself some just before Christmas, but the box was damaged – and my sister breathed a sigh of relief lol
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Dear CE,
Once more you’ve twisted a plot and left me mouth agape. First I thought it was a car accident. Looping the story is effective. Well done. .
Shalom
Rochelle
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And now, m’lady, as ever you do not know what to think!
My job is done here.
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I love the repeat of the first line at the end, but with a completely different meaning. Excellent!
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Thank you, Steve, I am delighted that this had the desired impact.
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Love the way the story loops back on itself with the last line!
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Glad it worked for you, Martin.
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