AnElephantCant walk through that door
He sees it is half way up a wall
He can’t fly he can’t jump
He lands with a terrible bump
For some reason there are no stairs at all
Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Our Princess de la Porte Rochelle opens up a plethora of possibilities to perceptive pedants who practice poetic perfectionism.
And AnElephant tries to squeeze through.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.
Copyright Lauren Moscato
The Message
Make sure he knows why you are killing him.
I nod my head, still counting the notes.
You remember what you have to say, he asks for the third time.
I nod again.
I will take care of it, I say patiently.
Good man, they told me you are the best, he enthuses.
He almost pats my shoulder, thinks better of it.
Don’t contact me again, I say, pocketing the photograph.
And you won’t forget….
His voice trails off as I leave.
I knock on the door.
It is opened by the face I have memorised.
I shoot him twice in the chest, wordlessly.
If you want a message delivered, I think, hire a postman.
Sound Bite Fiction 
Loved your poetry at the start and your last line. Very witty.:)
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Wonderful rhythm and atmosphere. AnElephant knows how to lull his reader.
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Thank you so much, TFTM, AnElephant loves your visits.
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and visa versa. 😉
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Breathtakingly good. I’m in awe of your skil. I’m going to read it again just for the pleasure of it.
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Jings and golly gosh!
AnElephant is for once almost speechless.
Thank you, Margaret, and mammoth hugs!
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Assassin/postman – always get those two confused. No wonder my Valentines never get back to me. You are such a helpful elephant.
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Easy mistake to make.
They both tend to be destructive forces!
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Loved it, top to bottom. I love how you always put the verse at the top and then do the story. So perfect
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Shucks, Samantha, AnElephant is not quite perfect.
But he is delighted to give you such pleasure.
He is, above all, just an old rhymer at heart.
See his Saturday posts.
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AnElephant is pretty perfect! It is such a pleasure to read 🙂
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Loved the twist at the end and great story. Brought a smile to the dial.
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AnElephant is happy to bring a lovely smile to a lovely dial.
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Forget? Why anelephantcant never forgets!
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Who said that?
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Yeah. Elephants have great memory.
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Dear Elephant, Excellent story and I agree with the last line too – very well thought out! Nan
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Thank you.
AnElephant has a special hug for Nan this week.
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I think he got the message good and clear, although he will not remember…
Either way, great writing!
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AnElephant thanks Francesca and is happy she enjoyed.
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Brilliantly executed!!!
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AnElephant loves a pun!
Thank you.
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Now I’ll never know why he had to die. Darn 100 words.
Tracey
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Who cares, AnElephant gets paid!
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Loved your last line particularly:)
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AnElephant thanks Helen, always so kind.
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Besides once he’s dead, he won’t remember anyway.
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You think!
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Well, it’s not like he going to tell anyone he didn’t get the message.
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So Elephant, how much do you charge? How very Dashiell Hammet of you. You are multi-graced. Poetry, comedy…flashing noir 🙂
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AnElephant can do most anything
AnElephant can even dance and sing!
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I’m not sure the message needed words, Elephant. Loved the tone and character you infused into this story. Hire a postman indeed. Good stuff!
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AnElephant is very happy Elmo enjoys.
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AnElephantCant help admiring the strong silent type.
Thank you for your (non-)comment!
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Oh for crying out loud, how’d I manage that? Loved the story though, it was most excellent!
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You should have said.
AnElephant enjoys praise.
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I like this assasin a lot!
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And he likes you too!
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I laughed!
AnElephant this week is comical
the killer laconical
and no one went postal!
Genial!
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AnElephantCant
Tell emmylgant
That her wee rhyme
Is a far worse crime
Than his 100-word rant
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Emmylgant argue
it is criminal
and not funny at all.
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And who would ever know if the message was delivered?
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Only the guy with the shooter.
That’s the way we tough guys talk!
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Ah yes. Let the gun do your speaking for you. I can see how that would be an effective method of communicating one’s desires.
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Loved it.
That last sentence is a killer and just makes this whole piece awesome.
KT
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Very glad, thank you for your glowing comment.
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I shouldn’t laugh but I nearly rolled on the floor. Such acerbity, such drollness. The whole thing spoke volumes about the perpetrator. Excellent!
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AnElephant loves to entertain.
Thank you, Sandra.
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Dear AEC,
Perfect voice and actions for your main character. This was a very good read (said the postman). Well done.
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Thank you, sir, AnElephant is dead chuffed!
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Dear Elephant,
For such a sweet, gentle pachyderm, you seem to have a mean and dark side. I think the recipient got the message. 😉 Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Sweet and gentle?
Shucks, no wonder AnElephant is pink!
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