The Rendezvous – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant believe his calendar
It is already Wednesday again
He prepares once more to fail
To write a cool tale
But he tries so he sharpens his pen

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Set in stone by statuesque Rochelle, this is a presentation of magnificent masonic fiction sculpted by writers from around the globe.
And ARockHeadedElephant.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright Alastair Forbes

Copyright Alastair Forbes

The Rendezvous

He showers thoroughly, thinking about her.
Totally smitten.
He met her yesterday, quite by chance, at the Art Gallery.
Love at first sight.
No phone number, she said, smiling, but tomorrow, same time, I will be here.
She indicates the stone head.
Before I go home, far away.

He has less than an hour to get there.
He stretches impatiently for a towel.
His foot slips.

She sighs, blinking back her tears.
Her sixth sense – all her senses – tell her he is the one.
She cannot believe her instincts are so wrong.
Her heart is shattered, like his leg.

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74 Responses to The Rendezvous – Friday Fictioneers

  1. pattisj says:

    If it was meant to be, their paths will cross again. Hopelessly a romantic here.

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  2. Hi Elephant,
    Finally getting to your story, and it was worth the wait. This could be the start of a fine romantic comedy. He should be on the French bathing plan, once a month, whether you need it or not. Ron

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  3. CherryPickens says:

    Okay. I’m going to hell. I laughed. Certainly, I should be sad about a true love. And I am. A little. Yeah, I’m going to hell, and it’s your fault for writing such a wonderful tale.

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  4. rgayer55 says:

    We’re on the safety warpath here at work. This is a perfect example of how slips, trips, and falls can cause pain in more than one way. Excellent writing.

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  5. I really, really want to read a love story from you that works … if it is about as deep as this, I’ll start to believe in love again! Great work

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  6. You have a knack of stirring the emotions in uncomfortable ways, Mr Anelephantcant. I love stories that can do that. Well done.

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  7. some things just not meant to be and others are – like broken hearts

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  8. Missed opportunities in poetic form. Nicely done tale. Elephants know what they’re doing!

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  9. Ouch! Life is full of chances that just don’t work… it reminds me of the film ‘Sliding Doors’, a little (which also made me cry). Well done, my Ele-friend.

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  10. Ah, so cruel, to be that close. Reminds me a bit of the movie Autumn Rush. This is one of those stories where the man goes and sits for years a the art gallery at the same time for years afterwards.

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  11. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear AEC,

    Legs mend. Hearts, not so much. Great story sculpted here.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  12. atrm61 says:

    Ah,a shattered leg will heal but the heart…Hope someday they will meet again and a happier ending will ensue. Wonderful use of 100 words-loved this tragi-rom(com) 😉

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  13. Sandra says:

    The hand of fate has intervened once more. Nicely done.

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  14. elmowrites says:

    Noooo! Well, this is why you shouldn’t play hard to get! Hopefully if it’s meant to be, their paths will cross again.

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  15. RoSy says:

    Oh nooooooooooo…
    Now my heart is shattered too 😦

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  16. Dear Elephant,

    A bittersweet tale indeed. A pity they didn’t exchange phone numbers. Well written, sir.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  17. A sweet love story, even with its sad ending.

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  18. DCTdesigns says:

    I was going along loving the soft anticipation of love never expecting the dénouement. Now my only hope is that like its predecessor (An Affair to Remember) these two find their way back to one another.

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  19. wmqcolby says:

    AHHHHHHH!!!! NO!!!!!
    Great work, Elephant! Something different and worth the read. I hated that ending … which is good. Superb.

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  20. This is excellent! AnElephant has really given us a tender, compelling story that makes me cry “Oh no!” at the end… Really, really, wonderful Sir!

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  21. Linda Vernon says:

    Ah! And here it was all going so well. Murphy’s law perhaps?

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  22. hugmamma says:

    Reminiscent of that oldie but goodie starring Cary Grant and Deborah Kerr. I hope your story has a happy ending…eventually.

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  23. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

    Her heart is shattered, like his leg…. this says it all, darling. This was excellent.

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  24. Definitely, the one that limped away…

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  25. misskzebra says:

    He should have called the gallery from the hospital! Where there’s a will, there’s a way!

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  26. rheath40 says:

    Like the movie, An Affair to Remember. Le sigh…..

    Love, Renee

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  27. helenmidgley says:

    If only……….. great job 🙂

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  28. kz says:

    awwwww 😦 but i can’t help but love it coz it’s so reminiscent of An Affair to Remember 🙂 and just so you know, dear Elephant, you never fail to write a cool tale. 🙂

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  29. vbholmes says:

    Sad story of bad luck. Perhaps he was lucky in the long run–sounds like “home” is, indeed, a far-away place if her nod to the stone head offers any clues.

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  30. mtdecker says:

    That time in September
    An Affair to Remember
    a tub to dismember.
    Love’s dying ember

    Sad, and yet, they could always meet again… someday.

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  31. high five and raspberries says:

    extremement triste ..elephants story a cruel twist of fate

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  32. Al says:

    Awwwww poor guy. Poor girl

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  33. Noooo! That can’t be right……..

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  34. emmylgant says:

    Excitement doused.
    An Affair to Remember
    Bien fait UnElephant!

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  35. Oh Sir Elephant that is so sad…my heart bleeds for the character…….oh fate can be cruel.

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