AnElephantCant contain himself
It is Friday Fictioneer time again
He must write a short tale
On a very small scale
He makes notes with his best fountain pen
What on earth can he find to say this week
What if he finds that he has writer’s block
That would be a pain
So to clear his poor brain
It makes sense to first go for a walk
The idea is to write a very short story based on a picture prompt (below).
That’s it.
Copyright -Douglas M. MacIlroy
He smiles to himself, although his heart is breaking.
How could that stupid, treacherous fool do that to the woman he loved?
The woman they both loved.
He does not know who tipped off the police, but they are everywhere.
They search the house, the barns, the outbuildings.
They know something is amiss.
The brute just stands there, pretending innocence, radiating grief.
While the third side of the triangle, her sister, dabs at her eyes with a scented handkerchief.
Time for action.
He moves the hosepipe, so that the water pours into the freshly dug ground, washing away the topsoil.
Sound Bite Fiction 
Fantastic. Even without the pay-off, I loved the idea of altruistic pro bono security guards.
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Thank you for your kind words, sir.
AnElephant finds it interesting that you posted your comment on a 2-year old story!
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I like your use of ‘triangle’: in this case the eternal ‘ménage à trois’.
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They say there are 3 sides to every story – his, hers and the truth!
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🙂
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Creative story from the prompt!
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Thank you very much, your comment is appreciated.
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Oh that’s a smart horse 🙂
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Not really, AnElephant made him up!
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Good story.
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Thank you, Catherine
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Oooo..I love it!
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Ooooo….thank you!
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Clever horse. And I thought he was watering the lawn!
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AnElephantCant dispute the clever gee gee
Just makes his own bid here for fame
And he must say moreover
To lovely Lindaura
That she has the most wonderful name
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Kudos on ur story and a bigger kudos to jules and you on the poetry routine ! enjoyed it 🙂
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AnElephantCant hide his dismay here
He spends several days creating his story
Then in a brief flake of time
Lovely Jules with a rhyme
Steps in and steals all AnElephant’s glory!
But, seriously (really?), very glad you enjoyed your visit.
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anelephant has met a formidable oponent
anelephant trumpets loud and hard, but cant shake jules away
we now know shreyank cant even make up a nursery ryhme
and hence enjoys(really!) the banter of anelephants an’ jules ryhmes ! 🙂
btw he also likes anelephant’s story ! 🙂
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AnElephantCant thank Shreyank enough
His words really are pretty cool
AnElephant is rather inept
And out of his depth
When he tries to swap rhymes with sweet Jules
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Wonderful story. I love the depth of emotion of all involved.
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Thanks, David, glad you felt it.
Horses, like Elephants, have feelings too!
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Wickedly nice and the start to a longer short story. Well done.
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Thank you, your comment is much appreciated.
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Very very cleverly written. The story trips along nicely revealing the clues along the way. I especially like ‘the third side of the triangle’. Brilliant.
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How very kind of you.
So happy you enjoyed.
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The murderer never imagined the horse would be the weakest link of his plan.
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Nor the writer!
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Never underestimate a horse. I enjoyed how you cleverly wove him into the tale.
Denmother
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He was fundamental to it.
He was in the picture!
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What a neat story you came up with for this photo. And such a clever horse!
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Thank you.
AnElephant taught him all he knows!
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Dear Elephant,
Quite a tale, or is that tail, you’ve woven. A good ride and a good read.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle.
And cheers to you.
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Brilliant! Clever horse.
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AnElephant thinks that ‘brilliant’ is for him!
Thank you.
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Well conceived and crafted. I particularly enjoyed your rhyming intro.
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Thank you.
And thank you.
AnElephant usually only does rhymes.
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Loyal horse
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Well, a bit disgruntled, at least!
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Glory in Gory
AnElephantCant say he isn’t clever
To tell a mystery in one hundred words
The horse content to expose the fiends
Greedy ‘bird’ and fella won’t get all the beans
Thank goodness the prompt was not of birds
As I imagine them, the sky full of vultures
Worse than ducks a squawking
Police, Detectives and M.E. too –
Body’ll be less a few pieces parts for you…
Lady fingers for dinner – those scavengers are stalking!
©JP/davh
🙂
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AnElephantCant rhyme like smart Jules can
He just churns out silly verses
No birds in his post
But what he likes the most
He also had less than two horses
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🙂
You had two ‘Chicks’, ‘Dames’, ‘Gals…’
One a ‘nasty Nellie’, the other ‘done-in’
You rhyme just fine. My fellow poet!
I was, after all only following your gracious lead.
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AnElephantCant claim he’s a poet
At best he’s a wannabe rhymer
But when he writes his prose
It’s the smart horse who knows
How to expose that murderous two-timer
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Awe.
In prose and rhymin’
I like your timin’
If I am any Jewel…’tis but an opal I am,
Beauty because of cracks and imperfections.
Cheers.
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AnElephantCant compete
Jules’ rhymes are way too neat!
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The pen oft strays…I can get gooey romantic and serious too.
I dabble in alota stuff. Some say there is no such thing as a Muse,
I think my Muse would not be amused. Enjoy.
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2013/02/wwp-142-charmed-and-lucky-too.html
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Visited and commented.
Thanks.
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Take another look…she implores..,
It’s Jimny Cricket talking…to his grandchild
How’s that for being wild?
Completely in jest,
imagination s-t-r-e-t-c-h-e-d to fictional limits.
They’ll be no test.
I can’t help it if
the spiel
seems real.
At the end of the day
Some of my words
are just ‘drawn that way.
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Very good! Great use of what wasn’t said. I loved the horse washing away the top soil. With any luck they will find her and he will get what he deserves. I am guessing that the sister was involved?
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Thank you.
That was kinda where it was going …..
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Sounds like this triangle was actually a square! Glad the brute will get his justdesserts.
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Hmm, perhaps geometry is not AnElephant’s strong point!
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animals are so smart, love this tale.
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Well, horses are, thank goodness.
And thank you.
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Wow, just brilliant, what a clever idea for the photo prompt! 🙂 xx
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Thank you, dear Penny, you are too kind.
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What a great idea! Well done
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Thanks, Sandra, glad you enjoyed.
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An elephant writing about a horse who’s about to uncover a murder. Now that’s something!
janet
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Well, not all quadrupeds are as dumb as AnElephant!
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Nice twist for the photo prompt.
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Thank you so much.
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clever horse ^^ clever tale ^^ well done
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Your comment is much appreciated.
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…He knows where all the bodies are buried. Very imaginative and ingenious.
Formidable!
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Well, to be fair, just the one body ….
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Impressive!
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How lovely to see you here, Donna.
And praise from you!!!
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ohhh I cannot wait until the second chapter of this mystery! 😉
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Second chapter?
Sorry, no words left!
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Cool. I like that
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Thanks, glad you did.
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